User:Lolitascc/Off Our Backs/Bew0812g Peer Review

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Reviewing Lolitascc's contributions to the wikipedia page for 'Off Our Backs'.
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Lead
Perhaps could try and make the lead paragraph a little bit more conscise or more of a singular naturally flowing paragraph and then save some of the smaller detaisl for seperate paragraphs, but really good either way! Heres an example of the lead slightly re-written in case but like i said its really good either way. : Off our backs was a radical feminist periodical published from 1970 to 2008, making it one of the longest-running feminist publications in the United-States. The periodical was founded by Marilyn Salzman-Webb and Marlene Wicks, emerging as a response to what many felt was an underrepresentation of the women's liberation movement in mainstream media. Off Our Backs relied on subscriptions for funding and was produced and edited by a collective of women using a consensus model for decision making. The periodical covered a wide range of feminism related topics such as issues of international affairs, women's rights, activism, sexuality, women of color and social justice and positioning itself as a news journal for and about women. It began as a newspaper, transitioned to a magazine, and ultimately became a quarterly publication before financial difficulties led to its closure in 2008. The archives of Off Our Backs are currently being held and preserved at the Hornbake Library of the University of Maryland.

Content
Content added is highly relevant and important to the selected topic

"The first issue of Off Our Backs was published on February 27, 1970, consisting of a twelve-page tabloid first issue. The first issue included articles about the birth control pill, abortion rights, Korean women’s movements, and advocacy for women’s rights protests and oppositions '''. The first issue was written by a collective of 17 women, namely Marlene Wicks, Alison Sand, Roxanne Dunbar, Martha Atkins, Conni Bille Finnerty, Paula Goldsmid, Bonnie McFadden, Charlotte Bunch-Weeks, Sue Tod, Jessica Finney, Marilyn Salzman-Webb, Norma Allen Lesser, Anne Hutchinson, Rachel Scott, Coletta Reid, Regina Sigal, and Alice Wolfson." -''' In this section maybe try and find some different ways to say 'first issue' to avoid repitition (ex : inaugural release, initial edition, etc)

'Off Our Backs'' published its last issue in 2008 due to financial difficulties. -''' This sentence feels like it could be reworked to be a bit more clear. Something like : After releasing what would become the final edition of the magazine, Off Our Backs were forced to suspend their publishing practices, citing financial struggles as the primary factor behind the cessation.

Tone and Balance
The tone of the article is neutral and balanced and there are no undertones of bias or persuation. Overall perfect in this regard.

Sources and References
Sources appear high quality and highly relevant.

Organization
Article is well written and easily comprehensible

Could potentially create a section dedicated enitirely to the synopsis or content of the show and just move some of the parts of the article where you talk about this to that new section or write a new small paragraph. Potentially too you could move some of the collective structure content to this section. Just an idea though and definately not necessary.

Images and Media
If there are any images available which would meet the wikipedia terms then that would definately be a good addition to the article.

Overall impressions
Overall the additions are very strong and highly improve upon the original page.