User:Londonisawesome/Renal compensation/Maria0330 Peer Review

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Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: When reading my peer's article focused on renal compensation, I noticed that the lead did a good job at including an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly described the overall topic. Although it was a brief sentence, the student made sure to explain the mechanism behind the process of renal compensation and what it means for the body with regard to the kidneys and even plasma pH regulation. Another point that I noticed while reading this article was that the student did not include a brief description of the article’s major sections in the lead section prior to covering the main topics within the article. Instead, I felt as if the writer jumped right into the main body of the content without slowly introducing parts of the topic in a more step-by-step way. As a first time reader, I felt like the text was a little overwhelming to take in at first, and thus, I believe that separating the content into more visible paragraphs may aid in the overall reading process.

Content: With regard to the content added to this article, the writer did an impressive job at finding extra information and more in-depth details about renal compensation and even plasma pH regulation from peer-reviewed sources. Prior to their edit, the article only had about three sentences explaining the concept, but this writer was able to add in a lot more relevant content related to the topic, such as detailed information about the ideal pH levels within the human body and even provided details about what can occur when the pH of the body drops below a certain level, leading to a concept known as acidemia and even provided details on what can happen when the pH of the body rises above a certain level, thus leading to a phenomenon known as alkemia. Throughout the entire content section, the writer seamlessly connects topics related to renal compensation and pH regulation without confusing the readers with any unnecessary details.

Tone & Balance: The content of this article was presented in a very neutral and unbiased way, with no particular position being heavily favoured over another. The information was detailed and factual, with no personal opinions clouding any of the points made. Furthermore, the writer made sure to follow the instructions and tips provided by the Wikipedia training modules early in the term by incorporating the lessons into their writing perfectly. The writer also made sure to keep the overall tone of the article very professional and kept everything in the third person point of view, thus making everything easier to read and understand from a scientific perspective.

Sources & References: With regard to the sources and references, the writer made sure to back each of their points with a reliable secondary source of information throughout their article. Each sentence included proper in-text citations as well as a proper reference to the secondary source included in the reference section at the end of the article. Furthermore, the articles used as references do in fact accurately reflect what the cited sources say and can easily be used to trace down exactly which source the information came from. The writer made sure to include a wide array of articles and made sure to focus more on peer-reviewed articles than random websites as secondary sources to back up their information. The links added to the article all worked and opened up on the appropriate content page related to the topic covered in this Wikipedia article.

Overall: The overall grammar was good and the image added was okay as well. Adding a more realistic image may have helped with visualizing the overall process related to renal compensation a bit better, but given the issues with regard to copyright laws, the image used got the point across just fine and everything was still well done!