User:Lonelychild1/Urban ecology/Timmy Thyme Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Urban ecology with EstherM04, Lonelychild1, Muhammadtoure1999 editing this article.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Lonelychild1/Urban_ecology?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Urban ecology

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The 'Lead' is quite similar to the actual article with small changes like grammar and deletions of unnecessary parts. The article body about greenhouse gases goes more in depth about what kinds of emissions are emitted. A majority is original words and are not copied from the article though the last few sentences on the bottom seem to suggest that they included that because they didn't want to get rid of the original text. I suggest changing it to make it more easier to read as well as fix grammar errors on words you made capital. The last two topics of 'Improving Urban ecology' and 'Improving wildlife connectivity' may be under 'Ways to improve urban ecology: civil engineering and sustainability', Though it's shorter than 'Greenhouse gases', expanding on these topics may be helpful like provide examples or more information. 'How do urban animals affect humans?' and 'Biodiversity and urbanization' may be additional sections your group either plan on adding or editing but the topic of 'Life on Land' should be the main focus instead of a more broad subjects.