User:Loon-erMoth/Brownfield regulation and development/ClimateGuardian Peer Review

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Loon-erMoth and ThistleHatch
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 * User:Loon-erMoth/Brownfield regulation and development - Wikipedia
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 * Brownfield regulation and development - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Bibliography review: The bibliography looks great, aside from one minor change. Based on looking at the citations, it looks to be APA format. With that, only the year needs to be listed for each source after the authors names. For example, this citation from the bibliography: Henry, C. (2022, March 29). Brownfields: What Are They and How to Make Them Green Again. icma.org. https://icma.org/articles/article/brownfields-what-are-they-and-how-make-them-green-again

The beginning of the citation would only need to be Henry, C. (2022) if utilizing APA format for citations.

Also, I like that the sources provided are all new articles. Although it is not necessary, it shows that there is more current information being written about brownfield development. I thought all the sources were good, and I did not see anything wrong with utilizing any of them.

Article Review:

I really like the addition of material for this Wikipedia article. The original Brownfield regulation and development Wikipedia page is pretty barren, and the information that is being added is vital to understanding brownfields. For the background section, I would suggest adding a link to the definition of words/phrases such as "volatile organic compounds" and "poly chlorinated biphenyls." So, in the first sentence of the background: "Common contaminants found in brownfields include volatile organic compounds, poly chlorinated biphenyls (PCB), and heavy metals" my suggestion would look like this: Common contaminants found in brownfields include volatile organic compounds, poly chlorinated biphenyls (PCB), and heavy metals." This is not necessary but adds a link that allows readers to understand more thoroughly about the topic at hand.

Also, if the background information was not general knowledge, I would make sure to add an in-text citation for where the information came from. I noticed that throughout the whole article draft as well. The citations are listed at the bottom, but they just need to be linked into the article paragraphs so people can see where the information came from or do more research if they want.

I really like the addition of international policies, as I feel like that adds a broader viewpoint, and allows readers to see what is going on around the world and not just in the United States. As I said before, make sure to add in the in-text citations to link the articles. It will just show up with a superscript with a number next to the sentence that is being cited.

As a very minor change in the EU Policy and Remediation paragraph, I would add in a definition for the polluter pays principle, or link to the definition like I suggested before. There may be some people who are reading that are not sure what that means, so I think it could be a good reference. The sentence I am referencing is this one: "Polluters are expected to pay the cost of remediation on the basis of the “polluter pays principle”, however it is not strictly enforced and alternative sources of funding are often required." I added a hyperlink into the sentence as a potential way to add in the definition.

In the final paragraph of the article, I wanted to bring up a few minor grammatical changes. For this part: "Most of the brownfield sites for redevelopment are located in cities, and can be used for residential or commercial purposes to obtain the greatest land price. However, many have pollution history spanning half a century or more. Time constraints for redevelopment and remediation, as well as expenses, can make complete restoration unlikely to achieve a goal of pristine conditions, applicable for multiple purposes." I added in bold some minor grammatical changes that could be made to help the sentences flow better. Just a suggestion of course!

Overall, I think the added paragraphs are great and add in necessary information to further understand brownfield development and regulation. I enjoyed reading the paragraphs that would be added and gained a lot of knowledge. I thought everything written made sense and nothing came off as opinion-based or anything like that. Great work!