User:Lovelyr79/Adverse childhood experiences/LehmanGirlMD Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

lovelyr29 Lovelyr29


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Lovelyr79/Adverse childhood experiences
 * User:Lovelyr79/Adverse childhood experiences
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Adverse childhood experiences
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Adverse childhood experiences

Evaluate the drafted changes
You did a great job at researching the neurological impact trauma has on the brain, which in turn leads to low literacy scores. Re-read your article for word choice and grammatical errors, there were just a few. In terms of relevancy, I question whether or not refugee children should be included in this section. While they do go through an immense amount of trauma, if this sections is just generally talking about the effects of trauma on the brain, perhaps they should be dis-included because they vary from the overall focus of the topic. Your citations are great and your overall tone is very neutral.

I think this article has a neutral tone. It also provides valuable information that is pertinent to the topic being discussed. I would review some of the word choices in the first two paragraphs.