User:Lovelyr79/Adverse childhood experiences/Literacystudent Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

lovleyr29


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Lovelyr79/Adverse_childhood_experiences?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Adverse childhood experiences

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

You did a great job at researching the neurological impact trauma has on the brain, which in turn leads to low literacy scores. Re-read your article for word choice and grammatical errors, there were just a few. In terms of relevancy, I question whether or not refugee children should be included in this section. While they do go through an immense amount of trauma, if this sections is just generally talking about the effects of trauma on the brain, perhaps they should be dis-included because they vary from the overall focus of the topic. Your citations are great and your overall tone is very neutral.