User:Lpara002/Tim D. White/Cocoa2021 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Lpara002


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Lpara002/Tim_D._White?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Tim D. White

Evaluate the drafted changes
The article did very well in summarizing Tim D. White's life, and detailing how his life always had a connection to the anthropology field, as the author gave a timeline of his life, detailing his achievements. The changes I would suggest that the author should apply is to add sources, as nowhere in their draft was there any showcased of where they found this information. The most important thing the author could do is to add sources, as without sources a viewer may not know where you received this information and wouldn't know if what you stated was truly true. Connecting this to my own article, I will use more subtitles on my page, as yours helped your page flow better and easier.

Your lead is concise and includes an introductory sentence that allowed me to know what your article is going to talk about. Your article provided more details and information than the original page have. Your content seems up-to-date and is very relevant to the topic, I believe that all your content belongs in this article. Your tone is very neutral, and does not seem biased or tries to persuade its audience in a certain direction.

This content is not backed up by any sources.

The content is very clear and easy to read. It does not seem to have any spelling errors. The content is very organized, on its page it contains different sub-sections that showcased what each paragraph will talk about.

The author did not add any images or media.

This page will add more information and will improve the quality of the article. The content can be improved by adding sources. The strength of this article is how clear and concise its page is.