User:Lps2021/Loizza Aquino/Anypaver124 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Lps2021, Julsy2002


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Lps2021/Loizza Aquino


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Lead has been updated to include a brief description of the article. It is concise, could maybe include a bit more information, but definitely sets of the rest of the article.

Content in the article seems to be up to date (she is a living person) and relevant to the topic (nothing is out of place information wise). Content is well organized, chronologically, and makes sense. Content also deals with the equity gaps, being the topic is a mental health activist from the Philippines (originally). Content is neutral, stating information about her life and her activism, in a neutral tone.

Sources are from many different places, a source used frequently is an interview with Aquino herself. Sources are thorough, as this is a recent topic, there is limited information on her and her activism and also sources that are not books or databases, but overall good sources with information being summarized accurately. Sources are from many different authors and the links work correctly.

No grammatical or spelling errors noticed, it is concise and well organized. Liked that they included a section of the awards she has one for her activism. Maybe could possible breakdown the Activism section into smaller sections, like one for Peace of Mind Canada and or their events.

No media

Overall- content is well organized and does a good job of using the information available. Might be able to divide the article up further into more sections but overall, well organized and clear summary