User:Lps2021/Loizza Aquino/KhushiRamnani Peer Review

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Evaluate the drafted changes
The article is structured well, the sub-topics are relevant and descriptive to Aquino's activism and career. While the sentences are concise, I would consider rephrasing certain lines to make them sound professional or more eloquent; for example, discussing topics like suicide in the middle of the article rather than as the introduction of the paragraph. The content addresses the Wikipedia equity gap as this activist has contributed so much of her time and efforts without any direct recognition. The content does seem to be neutrally based with no significant bias, I would suggest redacting a few lines that don't add more to describing Aquino's life. The research is also conducted well, with independent and relevant sources cited, I would add some more hyperlinks just to ensure that this article is shared or easily directed to. The references might be a bit exhaustive, so I'd suggest linking only the main links that are referenced directly in the article and a few independent links. Overall, the article is well-written and describes Aquino's career and endeavors precisely and with balance, it is a digestible and entertaining read.