User:Lshersh/Prosthesis/Kimjammer Peer Review

General info
Lshersh
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Lshersh/Prosthesis
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Prosthesis

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?

I think this is an awesome addition to this article, incorporating a new section that isn't currently well covered by the existing article. It also works in a lot of the ideas we have been exploring in class, which is great.


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?

It's great that all of the claims are backed up by a published paper focusing directly on the stated topic. However, I would suggest paraphrasing the information in your own words instead of quoting the sources here, as I don't think they necessitate a direct quote. Stating your claim/facts directly and just putting the citation on the end instead of using the "according to X..." structure would also make it feel more like a Wikipedia article than a student paper.


 * Check a few links. Do they work?

The citation links all work! It looks like your second citation might need its date fixed though.


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?

All of the text written by you is clear and easy to read!


 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?

No.


 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Yes, there is a clear division between the two sections discussing the ethical and social aspects of prosthetics. Just curious, where are you planning to insert this section in the main article?