User:Lucy.kary/Coming out/Edpe77 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Lucy.kary


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Editing User:Lucy.kary/Coming out - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Coming out - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

I think that you made a really good contribution to the article. I receive the parts that you contributed as neutral and informative. The paragraph is overall concise and clear.

On the sentence, "55% of homeless LGBQ and 67% of homeless transgender youth..." I would add an "About" at the beginning.

The sources that you are citing work and they related to what is written in the article. I liked that you also went through the already cited sources and checked if the links were working.

I liked that you found information to update the media section as well.

Overall, I think that you made a great contribution to the article and that you found a good source to back your statements. The paragraph fits nicely and expands more on the topic that was discussed on the previous paragraph. The parts that you added meet Wikipedia's notability requirements by citing at least two sources. One improvement could be to cite another source specifically when you talk about homelessness impacting an individual's life. Perhaps expand more on the impacts of homelessness.