User:Lucyc2/School Psychology/Jacob k 2022 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Lucyc2


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Lucyc2/School_Psychology?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * School psychology

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

-No lead

Content

-The content added to the topic is relevant and very well done. Most of the content seems to be from the 2000s, with the first citation being 2012 and the second being 2019. After looking through the struck-out portion, I agree

that the information gives off a vibe of being written differently, so I agree that it may have to be reworked. It might be better to write from the ground up as you seem to be doing.

Tone and balance

-From the inclusion you have put, the content seems neutral and does not attempt to persuade the reader. No claims seem to be heavily biased as well.

Sources and references

- Overall, the sources seem to come from official forms of media, and all the links you included work. However, you do have to do a little reformatting on the actual links themselves to get rid of some errors.

Organization

- Your draft's organization seems a little strange to me just because it does not follow a top-down format; however, As long as you know where you will be putting your additions, I believe it will be okay.

Images and media

- There are no images

Overall impressions

- I can tell from looking at your draft that you have put a lot of time, effort, and thought into improving the article. Suppose I was going to add anything else to the article. In that case, I may look more into cultural biases and maybe the assessment process concerning issues to school psychology. I feel there could be more information about either of these topics. I liked how you improved the prevention section, but I believe you could add just a little more; however, that would take some time to look at more information. Overall your additions to the article seem to improve the article. Your content adds more validity and helps ensure correct non possibly plagiarized information will be released.