User:Lucyniyaz/Deafness in Uzbekistan/Kntahaney Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Lucyniyaz


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Lucyniyaz/Deafness in Uzbekistan
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi, Lucy! This looks great so far! Everything written is clear and in a neutral tone. The article is well-structured and notable. All sources seem reliable and are easily accessed through the links in your citations. All of the content included is relevant.

Lead:
This is a concise, well summarized introduction. You did a great job of linking to other existing Wikipedia articles! I really like what you have there, and it seems pretty complete, so I hope you don't mind my few slight grammatical corrections:


 * Last line: insert it is not recognized as
 * First paragraph: adults and children

History:
The source you have here was easy to access through the link and is incredibly interesting!

Deaf Education:
I like what you have here, but if this information is available, I'd like to see more included such as how many of these deaf schools exist and where within Uzbekistan they are located. Also make sure to cite a source for the statement that is there.

Additionally, this could be expanded to include information about university and career opportunities or lack thereof.

Lack of Resources:
I'm sure you have plenty more to add here, as it's likely easier to find information about what's not provided than what is. Information about medical care may go nicely under this section, assuming that it's not ideal.

Deaf Associations:
The content in this section is well summarized. However, adding a sentence to the beginning of the JICA section to immediately make clear its connection to Uzbekistan may be helpful.