User:LuisNazaire/Ribulose 5-phosphate/Starpower28 Peer Review

General info
Luis Nazaire
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:LuisNazaire/Ribulose 5-phosphate
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Ribulose 5-phosphate

Evaluate the drafted changes
Luis Nazaire’s lead in the Sandbox was not explicitly stated, nor were his contributions to the article body. I wish this information was more clear. However, through his Outline of Proposed Changes, it is possible to see what he contributed. However, pertaining to the article itself, the lead is concise and clearly states what the stub is about. The content that was added by Luis is applicable to the topic of Ribulose-5-phosphate because he mentions the reagent phosphopentose epimerase which can act upon Ribulose-5-phosphate to form two different products, ribose-5-phosphate and xylulose 5-phosphate. The content added seems to be up to date.

The content added is neutral and there are no claims that seem to be heavily biased towards one opinion since what was added are scientific facts. Due to this, the content added does not attempt to persuade the reader to favor one position over another, but rather educates the reader on the sort of reactions Ribulose-5-phosphate can be a part of.

All of the new content is backed up by a reliable secondary source of information, both of which can be found well cited in the references section of the stub. The content does accurately reflect what the cited sources say. Both sources are over 10 years old (2010 and 2011), which is relatively current, but more information about this topic could have come out since then. There might be a need to update the information with more current sources. Both links work.

The content that is added is well-written because it is concise and easy to read. However, I would have changed the way the second paragraph starts. Since this is the start of a new idea, separate from the topic sentence, the first sentence of the paragraph should not start with the word “it”, but rather stated what is “formed by phosphogluconate dehydrogenase”. Also, when you are making a broad statement, such that this compound is “involved in various metabolic pathways,” transition this sentence into the following sentences, so that the reader is aware what pathways you are talking about. This way presents concise, clear thought, rather than a dump of unclear information.

With the newly added information, I feel like the article is more complete and provides the reader with a better understanding of how Ribulose-5-phosphate is used for metabolic purposes. To improve, I would add better transitions between sentences and paragraphs.