User:Lujhs/sandbox

Article Evaluation
Milankovitch cycles

Evaluating Content

The article content is directed related to the topic ( Milankovitch cycles).

There is some content cited from the 1980's. More current or updated sources may better support the present views.

With regards to various images and graphs used, difficult regarding colour, size and contrast, especially should the reader have vision issues.

Evaluating Tone

The article is neutral. The various aspects of the topic is discussed such as : orbital shape, and effects on temperature, length and intensity of seasons.

A number of problems are also explored such as : 100 000-year problem and transition problem.

Evaluating Sources

The citation links work. For example citation 26: http://science.sciencemag.org/content/277/5323/215

Facts are referenced to appropriate and reliable references. The information comes from well-respected academic journals such as Science.

Checking the Talk Page

The talk page included discussions about difficulty understanding the content presented in its current form, and debate about the neutrality regarding certain complementary or contradictory theories. For example, Inclination Theory and Milankovitch cycles.

The article is rated B-class for the WikiProject Environment/Climate change and is rated B-class, High importance for Wikiproject Geology.

The article explores the topic more in-depth than what was discussed in class.

Posting on the Talk Page

My post on the talk page would be that the article content is quite difficult to understand for the general public. I had to research some extra concepts such as axial tilt.

Possible topics
Photic zone

The article content is directly related to the topic. The article is a stub.

The article is straightforward to read with minimal prior knowledge needed to understand the general idea.

The article is neutral. The article only contains one reference from a general encyclopedia.

The talk page discusses the validity of possible interchangeable terms such as epipelagic and euphotic.

The article is of interest to Wikiprojects for Lakes, Biology and Limnology & Oceanography

Aphotic zone

The article content is directly related to the topic. The article topic is directly opposite of the Photic zone. The article is a stub.

The article is straightforward to read with minimal prior knowledge needed to understand the general idea.

The article is neutral. The article contain references from textbooks and journals.

The talk page discusses the validity of possible interchangeable terms such as epipelagic and euphotic.

The article is of interest to Wikiprojects for Lakes, Biology and Limnology & Oceanography

Espresso crema effect

The article content is directly related to the topic. The article is a stub.

The article is neutral. The article has a reference to the Journal of Archaeological Science and Science.

The talk page discusses whether this topic has enough notability to garner an official article.

CopyEditing Exercise
Photic zone

Definition: ... exposed to intense sunlight. What is the scientific definition of intense? This cannot be some arbitrary value- could this be measured by change in temperature (Celsius/Fahrenheit/Kelvin), or energy (Joules)?

It.... It... It also... -- repetitive structure. Using more additive words or transitional words such as moreover, additionally, etc. could be helpful.

Long sentences- using repetitive phrase: the photic zone. After referring at the beginning paragraph, could use it.

Exercise: Finalizing your topic and finding sources
Reference List for Photic zone


 * 1) Photic zone Encyclopædia Britannica Online. 14 August 2009.

Possible added sources

Photic Zone - The Importance Of Nutrients And Light In Photic Zone. (n.d.). Retrieved from http://science.jrank.org/pages/5148/Photic-Zone-importance-nutrients-light-in-photic-zone.html

Peer Review 2 Articles
I reviewed Plastic soup

as followed:

The lead is a long sentence that needs to be broken down into shorter sentences. The explanation of the topic is clear. Difference examples of the environment impact could be added to motivate the reader to read on or take further interest in the topic. The third section is difficult to read. Please break down into shorter sentences. There could be more information regarding the rate of growth of plastic soups in the environment today. Great example of the advocacy group. Surely, there are more groups that could be included as reference? A sub-topic to explore more thoroughly is effects on aquatic ecosystems (any differences between salt and fresh water?) The content of the article focuses mainly on categories of plastic debris in the plastic soup. The article had a neutral point of view. The article had acceptable sources. However, the website is not an appropriate source. Great work and very interesting topic !

I reviewed User:Lakhdeep97/new sandbox for Loss-On-Ignition.

The lead is well defined. The explanation of the topic is clear. The structure and flow is readable. Although, the latter half of the Theory section seems to overlap and explain some of the general procedural steps for calculated LOI. Please break down into shorter sections to clarify. There could be more information regarding the detailed procedure (currently empty). Great opportunity to provide more examples of uses and visual aids to further expand on the topic and draw the reader’s interest. The LOI technique is a very visual technique so visual aids would greatly enhance the article. The safety section needs to be expanded. From the lead, this procedure implies a great amount of danger. Safety concerns need to be thoroughly explained to ensure the minimization of harm. The article had a neutral point of view. The article had relevant and appropriate sources. Great work and very interesting topic!

Reflective Essay
Overall, the Wikipedia assignment has been a very rewarding process- providing opportunities to improve my writing skills. For the article evaluation in Wikipedia, I learned that in general, Wikipedia compiles information from reliable sources. So, as a result, Wikipedia should not be harshly looked down upon as a resource for learning about different topics, especially in academia. With regards to my approach to critiquing the selected article, I looked specifically for stubs. These were articles that were already created by other users, but lacked information, while still being of interest to me. When deciding what to add to my chosen article, I focused on adding more information about the topic from reliable sources while maintaining appropriate structure for the reader.

My chosen article is the espresso crema effect. This article is a stub in geology and does not have an established notability. Consequently, my main contributions were adding background information to the topic and providing different examples of its uses. Compared to previous versions, my contributions, while valuable, may not be approved to establish notability (due to lack of credible sources regarding this topic in academia). It should be noted that due to necessity, a different topic may be selected to present as the final topic. Furthermore, there is high likelihood of merging, redirection or deletion of this article due to unestablished notability.

For the peer review process, it was great opportunity to reflect on my own article and writing process. While reviewing my peers’ articles, I focused on contributing and refining on the potency of the lead section (ability to draw the reader in), structural flow of the article, and the relevancy of the added content. For my own article, there were no peer reviews. Consequently, this may be a sign of the collective lack of interest in the chosen article, or the insignificance of the topic as a separate article.

For the feedback process, I did not receive any feedback from the Wikipedia editors. If I did, I would respond graciously and accept the constructive criticism to improve the article for the betterment of the reader.

For Wikipedia generally, it is a great resource for learning about numerous different topics and subtopics. Moreover, the contributions to Wikipedia are extremely collaborative effort. This is stark contrast to other assignments done in the past. Through Wikipedia, there is a global forum for discussion and feedback on various different topics (especially in academia). Wikipedia can be used to improve the public understanding of the topic by compiling many reliable sources while having healthy discourse. This is important to maintain the relevancy and neutrality of the global transmission of information in the modern era of “fake news”.

Wikipedia Article Assignment
In the end, I chose to edit and contribute to the article Cape Town water crisis. Only my changes and contributions are written below.

Introduction and Background
The Cape Town water crisis in South Africa is an ongoing period of severe water shortage in the Western Cape region. The City of Cape Town has been the most prominently affected. The decline of dam water levels began in 2015, and its most recent peak was in mid-2017 to mid-2018 where water levels hovered between 15 to 30 per cent of total dam capacity. First mentioned in late-2017, “Day Zero” was a popular term used by society to signify the specific date that the major dam water levels supplying Cape Town would decline below 13.5 percent. This indicator would enforce Level 7 water restrictions, where municipal water supplies would be widely shut off and residents would have to queue for their daily water allotment. At that time, the City of Cape Town was trending towards becoming the first major city in the world to potentially run out of water.

Late 2018- 2019
As the table above shows, despite the governmental declaration of the end of the peak of the water crisis in September 2018, recent measures indicate another upcoming decline of total dam storage capacity. The rate of change from 15 May 2014 to 15 May 2015, a period of one year, is 21.8 percent, which is widely considered to be start of the water crisis. Similarly, the rate of change from 8 October 2018 to 8 January 2019, a period of three months, is 12.2 percent. Given the rate of usage over the 3 month period, when extrapolating the rate of change over the same period of time, one year, total dam storage capacity is projected to decline to 27.4 percent. This is an indicator of another potential peak of the water crisis by the end of 2019.

Infrastructure Policy Concerns and Potential Solutions
Local government in South Africa have started to return to their focus of redistribution and democratization by adopting market principles in the delivery of essential services such as water access and distribution. The focus is on two cost-recovery policies, underinvestment in infrastructure and water cutoffs, which have previously been essential to a commercialization process in the water sector. The impact on low-income communities living in the townships is major, showcasing parallels to the historical inequities produced through territorial variation in service delivery such as the contemporary 'basic needs' approaches Furthermore, past service debts are leading to widespread water shortages. Both of these cost-recovery policies create local government inefficiencies in the management of water distribution as a public good.

There is the potential for continued use of Multiple-criteria decision analysis as a tool to help with integrated water resource planning for the City of Cape Town. Due to the rapid population growth and subsequent increased usage rates of water reservoirs, there is increased social pressure to help better manage water resources as well altered consumption behaviours.

Due to the anthropogenic exacerbation of climate change, extreme climate events droughts and low rainfall patterns have become more difficult to predict. Broad infrastructural policies mainly from the federal and provincial levels, have been used to adapt to water supply management strategies. However, there should be a more narrow focus municipally, to tackle specific issues that arise between climate change adaptions and water supply management.