User:Lumbarjax/Enterobacterial common antigen/Cadenprobert Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

IRoy00, Lumbarjax, Tracegaskill, 19-Ex-Nihilo-97


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Lumbarjax/Enterobacterial_common_antigen?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall the content that you added was very relevant to your assigned topic. Starting with you introduction I would add more about the actual structure of ECA. You dive straight in to talking about where it is located and expressed. Some more foundational knowledge of what it actually is would be useful here. You history section looks like a very rough draft. I would recommend putting the entire section into paragraphs that flow instead of a list of bullet points. I imagine that you were planning to do this.

Your synthesis section was very well thought out. I thought that it tied in with the introduction. Something I would check you sources to make sure that a broad range of sources agree with the hard facts that you are outlining in this paragraph. You make several bold statements that I would make sure several sources confirm before publishing. When speaking of studies you should site the actual study in the end of the sentence. Instead of writing, "In many studies," you could actually site a few of the studies that you are trying to reference.

I went through the rest of the questions and thought that your article met many of the criteria. It is very nuetral and you try to use several sources to balance your information.