User:Lunarmoon13/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Buddhism and Eastern religions

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I chose this article for two reasons. The first reason is because the subject of Buddhism and Eastern religions is adjacent to the religious tradition I chose for my Zine project, Jainism. The second reason was because upon first reading of the article, I was left with the feeling that it needs some serious copyediting work done to improve the flow of the piece. I believe that I will be able to improve the content and readability of this article.

Evaluate the article
The article seems to be unbiased and neutral in tone.

Opening lead section needs some work, could be catchier and more detailed about what Buddhism actually is, rather than its competition with other Eastern religions.

The article immediately jumps into Buddhism's comparison with Taoism, without explaining Buddhism as a religion at all.

In the Shinto section: "In the Japanese religion of Shinto, the long coexistence of Buddhism and Shinto resulted in the merging of Shinto and Buddhism." sentence is clunky.

"In post-war modern Japan, most families count themselves as being of both religions, despite the idea of "official separation"." Needs citation?

Hinduism opener could use copyediting.

External links #2, 6-9 do not work. ~