User:Lunathecat555/Sickle cell disease/SahamAli Peer Review

General info[edit]

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Lunathtecat55
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Lunathecat555/Sickle cell disease sandbox

Lead[edit]
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? No
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? Yes
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? Yes
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? Yes, it is concise.

Content[edit]
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? Yes
 * Is the content added up-to-date? Yes
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? Mentions barriers to treatments but doesn't go into detail in cost barriers of treatments for SCD

Tone and Balance[edit]
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral? Yes, the content added is factual and neutral, presented in an unbiased manner.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? No.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? No.
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? No.

Sources and References[edit]
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? Yes,
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? Yes they do
 * Are the sources current? Yes.
 * Check a few links. Do they work? Yes they all work

Organization[edit]
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? Yes.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? No.
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? Yes,

Images and Media[edit]
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic? N/A
 * Are images well-captioned? N/A
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations? N/A
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way? N/A

For New Articles Only[edit]
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

Overall impressions[edit]
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? Yes the information adds another perspective to SCD, I feel like in the first paragraph there is a statement that most people with SCD are black and I feel like it would be important to cite that information.
 * What are the strengths of the content added? It was material that wasn't a focus in the article
 * How can the content added be improved?

Overall evaluation[edit]
Overall this information is important to have on the page, there are one or 2 sections that I have highlighted below for the author to relook in order to create a stronger section!

"In the US, there are stigmas surrounding SCD that discourage people from SCD from receiving necessary care, many stem from racism since most people with SCD are Black." - '''Is there a source that states that majority of people who have SCD are black? I think it would be very important to include that data.'''

"People with SCD require comprehensive treatment to manage the disease and avoid further health complications. However, treatment in the US amounts to millions of dollars annually, most of the costs come from direct hospital care." '''- I feel like these two sentences doesn't exactly flow with the rest of the paragraph. In the sentence before these phrases says there are barriers and since you mentioned cost I thought you would go into cost barriers for Black people with SCD. Was it your intention to mention the costs of SCD to show that many people affected cannot pay or afford these treatments?'''