User:Lundgren10/African Pygmies/Evebautista Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Lundgren


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Lundgren10/African Pygmies


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * African Pygmies

Evaluate the drafted changes
I like how you added deforestation to the article. I think that it really made the article more complete overall. I didn't see any reference to the changes that you made. I think that you just need to add a reference just so that your data is backed up. I would talk more about how the Pygmy culture is being affected and threatened. I know it was mentioned in the sentence you added, but I think that it would be interesting to add more to that thought. I also don't think that a comma is needed after "recent times". -Evebautista