User:Lundgren10/African Pygmies/ShaneRollins3 Peer Review

Edited By: Shane Rollins

The article that you are reviewing "African Pygmies" received a B from the Wikipedia editors. With this good grade, it would be difficult to edit this article to make it better because it already has a lot of the information that it needs.

Bibliography- I do not see any added sources to your bibliography. Did you forget this step? I only see the page where it tells you to add them, although there are no sources.

Sandbox draft- it seems that this article is already heavily edited and received a good grade by the Wikipedia website. Maybe pick a different wiki page that is not as heavily edited so it would be easier to add new information, fix citations, and different punctuation. When you added your two sentences to the sandbox, you did not add where you got your information from in the reference box. The two sentences that you added seem to be appropriate, although where would you add them? I this article is doing a good job being "non-biased" in its viewpoint.

Article-This article is very well done and has a lot of very interesting information. It has a a lot of references, good punctuation, and is very detailed. I really like how there are different sections to this article describing the different music, origins, names, and so fourth. Very well done. The one thing that I would say do not include in your added comment, is your biasness towards the mistreatment of Pigmies.

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