User:Lupe.btista/Assumption (Hay Lakes) Indian Residential School/Natanej Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Lupe.btista


 * Link to draft you're reviewing https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Lupe.btista/Assumption_%28Hay_Lakes%29_Indian_Residential_School?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Some good things about the article were the tone was neutral, there was no bias, there was an introductory sentence, the information listed was relevant to the topic.


 * Some of the links did not completely match up with what was being said if that makes sense
 * For example, the 3rd link you input after you said "Of the 150,000 children that were forces to attend residential schools like Assumption Residential School, it is currently unknown.." and then you linked a page that did not really tie in with what you just wrote. I think it would be better to link the page where you found that information.
 * I think it would be better to use some different sources that reflect what you're saying better
 * It would also be good to link a definition of some of the terms that most people are not familiar with, like Dene Tha' First Nation, United Church of Canada's Indoctrination, etc
 * It would also be nice to incorporate some images or some sort of media to give the reader a visual to have a better understanding of the topic. Like for example you can input a picture of the school into the page.
 * As far as the outline, I did not see where the lead was besides the introductory sentence at the beginning of the article
 * For organization, the content included all seemed relevant and up to date for the the topic, but I think it would be good if you went more in depth and talked about a few things a little more. For example, if you talked more about the United Church of Canada and maybe (if any information about it) a little bit about 1 or 2 other residential schools and what they did, how they children were treated, etc.

In conclusion, the article was mostly fine except, having the cited sources for the relevant information, lack of images or media, and maybe talking a little more about the topics that I mentioned above