User:Luvbwiki/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Iranian hip hop

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
(Briefly explain why you chose it, why it matters, and what your preliminary impression of it was.)

This topic is a specific music genre but is deeply connected with resistance in the Middle East. I find it interesting and it is relevant to research and share why and how this music is relevant. My preliminary impression is that it could use some edits and restructuring.

Evaluate the article
(Compose a detailed evaluation of the article here, considering each of the key aspects listed above. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what a useful Wikipedia article evaluation looks like.)

Lead Section: The lead section of this page is very short, it could use an explanation on the article's main sections. The sentence on incorporation of classical music and literature is not yet explained in the article. It should be either explained or deleted.

Content: The history section of the article is very relevant. It could be elaborated a bit more. In addition this is the only section, the examples do not fit well within this section and should gain their own section. The content is not entirely up to date, there have been many recent developments, but the content has not been updated to include the developments.

There are many examples which now seems to be just a list of examples. This should be structured differently.

The article could be related to historically underrepresented topics, but currently fails to do so accurately.

Tone and Balance:

With the examples given and their praise, although cited, does not seem completely neutral. How hiphop is received in Iran could, I assume, be contrasting or opposed. This has not been discussed in the article.

Sources and References:

Almost all claims have been referenced, however not all references seem like reliable or relevant sources. The least recent reference is from 2008, so overall it is fairly recent sources. There are different sources, but many appear to be from within the music industry, this spectrum could be more diverse. There are as far as I can see no peer-revied published academic articles. The linked sources all work.

Organization and Writing Quality:

The text is fairly well written. However it is not well organized, there is only one section and not all information should be divided in that section. Some sentences could be written more clear and concise. I see no grammatical errors.

Images and Media:

The article contains no images. It does contain two music samples, which are clearly labelled. They are not the best quality, but they do work.

Talk Page Discussion:

On the talk page there has been brought attention to the unclear structure several times. Some users have made suggestions, but no big actions have been taken. Some edits have added and concomitantly deleted examples of artitsts.

The article is part of the WikiProject Hip Hop, Iran and Music. In all these projects it is rated Start-Class and Low-Importance. I notice that people's personal opinion do seem to rise in these discussions, I also notice not all users commit to Wikipedia Etiquette's we have discussed.

Overall Impression:

The article has an okay base but could use improvements. The structure should definetly be improved and there are some possibilities for the content as well. It is currently underdeveloped, but has potential to become more clear.

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