User:Lvega2/Puerto Rican Communist Party/Lynnsasaki Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Lvega2 (Luis)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Lvega2/Puerto_Rican_Communist_Party?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Puerto Rican Communist Party

Evaluate the drafted changes
Peer Review Comments by Section

Lead:

- Things that are great: Intro sentence is very brief but descriptive enough for readers to understand

- Things to edit: You also include some brief descriptions about the subsections you will be writing about. I recommend finishing the lead section after you finalize which subsections you want to include in the "content" section.

Content:

- Things that are great: The content you have so far is really detailed. You clearly have a solid grasp of the topic. I love your word choice as well!

- Things to edit: I think you switched to present tense for the second paragraph. Just make sure to stay consistent with the verbs.

- Things to add: I would expand on "the domination of the monocultural sugar industry" and how this led to economic instability. Is there any way you can provide more context regarding the sugar industry and how this led to the development of new political factions? I would provide more context on the political agenda of the original party that preceded the PCP. Continue with the content you have about what sparked this development of a new group. Focus on what each party wanted as a result.

I noticed that you're going to be adding a subsection on the Political Agenda of the PCP -- this is great! I would also include descriptions of the Socialist Affirmation group and their ideas (talk about how they differ from the PCP). In terms of political agenda, you can also include key events, people(!!), and important documents that represent the PCP well in terms of Puerto Rican history.

Do you also want to include the ideals and strategies of the Communist party in the context of the modern era? Maybe include a subsection on how this party has changed throughout the years. I'm sure there's been some shift in their ideas since their establishment in the 1930s.

Tone and Balance:

Written in a very unbiased manner. Really try to stick with the neutral tone as you start to develop the details on the PCP's political agenda.

Organization:

Organized well so far. Just make sure you include enough subsections to keep the page flowing well. I think it's better to do more subsections than less because they really help you keep your writing organized. It's also probably a lot easier for you to write.

Media:

No media so far, but I'm sure you will add it eventually. Does the PCP have any significant symbols or emblems you can include? Are there photos of any notable political leaders that you can include.

References:

I know we talked about the books you've gotten. These seem to be very reliable resources.