User:LydBo/Gonatus onyx/Jdx84 Peer Review

General info
LydBo, Ahoog11, and Skiah12
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:LydBo/Gonatus_onyx
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Gonatus_onyx

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

One aspect to keep in mind is the proper italicization of scientific names of species, ensuring that the genus name is capitalized while the species name is not capitalized. Additionally, I noticed that the external citations' footnotes in the 'Range and Habitat' sections are not functioning properly. These may just be a copying error from transferring information from the main article onto the sandbox, but I recommend double-checking all citations and scientific names before publishing the content from the sandbox onto the main page.

For grammatical structure, there were some sentences that I felt could have been consolidated into one sentence for better clarity and flow, so I would recommend re-reading the sentences and figuring out if you can combine them into one sentence that shares the same point. For example, instead of “Female G. Onyx are relatively unique as they hold the egg mass with their hooked arms due to loss of their tentacles. The females lose their tentacles after fertilization due to the inability to feed while holding their eggs”, you can write something like "Female G. onyx are relatively unique as they hold the egg mass with their hooked arms due to the loss of their tentacles, which occurs after fertilization due to their inability to feed while holding their eggs”. However, the way that the information is currently written doesn't distract too much from the content. So, using your judgement, it may be fine to leave it as it is.

For clarity and organization, it may be useful to change the section labeled 'Description' into 'Anatomy and morphology'. Most of the information presented in the main article is written in one large paragraph under one heading, so it might also be beneficial to divide related information into separate paragraphs or bolded subsections, each focusing on a specific idea or point. For example, in the 'Description' section you can have one paragraph discussing the mantle and the following paragraph discussing the clawed arms.

Overall, the added information is presented in a neutral tone and is written in a way that makes sense for a general audience so good job on enhancing the quality of the article!