User:Lydialzy/Lin Yi/MOIN2022 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Lydialzy, Meganshw


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Lydialzy/Lin Yi


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Lin Yi

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The introduction is definately detailed and buch more clear compare to the original article, it also gives me as the reader a good overall understanding about Lin Yi's main achievement and background information. From my perspective, the lead is well structured so far.

However, I saw you introduced a lot of his general life experience here, my opinion is that you can split these contents in the sections of his early life education, personal life and acting career. You can also expand by introducing how different film or tv series he participated influence his career path.

You can also describe her career from time to time. For instance, from 2015-2018, 2018-2019.etc., it will helps the readers to keep in track with his development.

It will also be helpful to add some film poster and photography of his works in your article since he is a public figure, an actor and a model.

* Citation number 3 is not working, so think about update it. :)