User:Lynnpj29/Harold Lasswell/Mitsuo500 Peer Review

From Terry:Hi, I assigned myself the Harold Lasswell article to peer review. I believe I'm supposed to leave the peer review here. I clicked on a link and it created this page.

General info
LynnPj29
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Lynnpj29/Harold Lasswell:
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Harold Lasswell:

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead
I feel the the leads on most articles are pretty much set.. I just moved a few words around in my article lead, but otherwise didn't touch it.

Content
Great work on adding personal history of Lasswell. I had assumed he was an European scholar, I find it is helpful to understand the biographies of important figures in our field. The additional content fills out his contributions to the field.

Tone and Balance
The tone is encyclopedic and the article feels balanced. Writing neutral is a skill that I have to concentrate on to get it right.

Sources and References
Great references and links. There is a lot of information about Lasswell, and it shows in the edited article.

Organization
I like the structure and headings. It helps me stay focused .. I think this typo might need an edit.

typo? not to be picky, but it stood out- ...He believe, like John Dewey, that one should pay...

should be: He believed (?).

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media

The two models of Communications charts are a great addition. It is the one thing we all know about Harold Lasswell as comm students. The links to other wiki articles work well.. I'll add links to my article, I see that it enhances the wiki experience.

Overall impressions
Your edited version of the Lasswell article is an amazing improvement of the current live article. The only note I would add is maybe a few more images.. just to keep the smartphone generation on the page, otherwise great job. I can see you've put in a lot of hard work getting the article into shape. The layout, and heading separations, definitely streamline the article. It looks like the article was first put up in 2002 and I'm surprised that it wasn't as filled out before your work on it. It seems that Harold Lasswell, being such an important person in the field, that the wiki article would've mirrored his stature with a robust article. Now he has one.