User:Lyocampo/Ah-Tah-Thi-Ki Seminole Indian Museum/Adi400x Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

I am reviewing Lyocampo' article, about the "Ah-Tah-Thi-Ki Seminole Indian Museum"


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Lyocampo/Ah-Tah-Thi-Ki Seminole Indian Museum
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ah-Tah-Thi-Ki Seminole Indian Museum

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hey Lyocampo, great work on the Ah-Tah-Thi-Ki Seminole Indian Museum article. I was going through it and wanted to address a couple things for my peer review. You had a great Lead with a short and concise yet explanatory paragraph. I would suggest adding small title descriptors about your major sections and headings in the lead, so readers can either scroll or hyperlink straight to that section if looking for a specific detail. Everything you talked about in the Lead was explained later in the article, which is great, except for the History of the Ah-Tah-Thi-Ki Museum section. In that section later in the article, you mention about the opening and the life of the museum after it was built. Since this is an article about a historic building, including information about both the reason for building the museum as well as the architects that helped design it/design processes prior to the Opening of the Museum.

Other than that, your images were great and informational with the topic next to it. You could add a little blurb under the photo with a little more information about the photo if you want but I think your explanations are good enough. Grammar and spelling wise, everything seems good, but I would just double check for run-ons or any funny sounding sentences, such as in the "375 linear feet of shelves, and individuals, including research, can use these items under "Breakdown of the Ah-Tah-Thi-Ki Seminole Indian Museum" Structure wise, everything is pretty well orgainized, I like how you included the "Seminole Tribe of Florida" section at the end for more information on the tribe based on the museum. I think you've done pretty good, and my suggestions are totally up to your interpretation but I hope this helps.

-adi