User:Lyola-ann/Kwele people/1326mmb Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Lyola-ann


 * Link to draft you're reviewing.
 * User:Lyola-ann/Kwele people - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Kwele people - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes.
The lead clearly describes the African community that is being spoken about throughout the article. The lead is concise and gives a quick and brief description of the community, however, it is not overly worded. Only a sentence was added to the lead, and the lead does not seem like it needs to be updated to fit the sentence cause the sentence seems to fit just fine where it is located. I think the lead could be improved by possibly including information relating to the population of the Kwele community or just giving general demographics of group.

The content that was so far added is informative and gives insight into the type characteristics of masks that the Kwele people used during ceremonies and during rituals. The subgroups of the different types of masks that are associated with the Kwele people along with describing the characteristics of the masks and how they are used among rituals and if they are used within ceremonies. The content that was added all is relevant to the community of people that it is associated with.

The content that was added is neutral and does not necessarily have any persuasion to it. The content is backed up by sources and also includes page numbers of where the information was found within the actual article. All the references are from various authors and all the links work and pull up the article or the book that the reference came from. One reference does indicate that the date might need to be fixed. The information that was added is clear to read and is also easy to read and there are no grammatical errors within the new content that is added to the article. The content is organized well to keep information separated by having masks in their own category and the Beete association their own category.

Overall, I believe that the new content that was added incredibly improved the article because originally, the article just kind of gave a quick overview of the Kwele community and with the new content that was included, it definitely gives more insight into who the Kwele people are and what their different masks are used for within their community. Obviously, some information for the headings is missing, not included yet, but the article is looking good!