User:Lyola-ann/Kwele people/Desmondx2000 Peer Review

General info

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 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Whose work are you reviewing?  Lyola-ann
 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Lyola-ann/Kwele_people?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Kwele people
 * Kwele people

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead Section: In this section it establishes some basic information about the Kwele people but it would be beneficial to make some additions to what they have and flesh it out a bit more. At the moment it seems very brief and leaves me wanting more information about the Kwele people and their culture. Adding in the sections about witchcraft, variety of masks, and the Beete association I believe would help strengthen your article and it can add on top of the know ledge thats been provided

Tone and Balance: Your tone feels informative and intentional in your decisions of which information you choose to share and it doesn't feels rushed or that you didn't have the proper facts either.

Content: What you have so far and what you plan to add is a good start but I would like to know more about their culture, certain practices, spiritual beliefs, and more.

Sources: I was a bit confused at first but considering your still collecting and consolidating information I understand why it look the way it does, but definitely consider adding more recent sources and references for your bibliography section.

Organization: Looking at the the layout initially my impression was that I wasn't confused, it had clarity, and it was presented well. It wasn't that difficult to follow along with the article and how the categories were placed.Although the pictures did clutter my vision some and I think rearranging some things will help it look better visually!

So overall I like what you have going so far, again my main concerned was seeing more information, pictures, and etc. Also the layout of the references and presentation of photos about the Kwele people could be cleaned up slightly.



Evaluate the drafted changes
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