User:Lyonsm9/Sandbox

Enter your proposed edits below here and above the "References" heading. Also enter the exact quote that you are paraphrasing from your source textbook or article. Let me know on my talk page when you're ready for me to look at your work. If you have any questions at all, ask on my talk page. Anthony (talk) 22:17, 21 November 2010 (UTC) <<<<copied here by Hordaland (talk) 06:22, 12 December 2010 (UTC)

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Hi Anthony, I think I have it set up now. I was wondering if you could check my edits? Here they all are:

Suicide prevention:

Suicide Risk assessment
In the prevention of suicide it is also important to develop an understanding of the likelihood of suicide intent expressed by an individual. A suicide risk assessment is therefore a key component in the avoidance of a person committing suicide. As referred to in The American Psychiatric Publishing textbook of suicide assessment and management (2006), suicide risk assessment is an assessment essential clinical tool which is used to demonstrate and identify the probable risk of suicide and to assess the likelihood, treatable risk and possible prognosis of suicide based on professional judgment. It assess the patients history of suicidal intent or vocalising of any suicidal thoughts as a determining factor in the level of suicidal intent.
 * I've removed "Suicide" from the sub-heading because, per the Wikipedia manual of style we don't repeat words from the article title in subheadings if it can be avoided.
 * I've replaced "assessment" with "essential clinical" because I think "assessment tool" is usually applied to such things as MMPI-2 and Rorschach.

Mania: Is a type of depression where the mood fluctuates. The person will experience spells of mania followed by short periods of depression. Often the manic state will remain the dominant state of the persons personality. According to the Clinical psychiatry: a text-book for students and physicians (1904), Kraeplin first separated mania from schizophrenia in 1899. The delusions between severe depression and mania reflect the mood disturbance.
 * Did you get this from Kraeplin (1904) or a textbook? Either way, can you tell me the page number/s you're drawing it from? (I'm not sure we can say mania is a type of depression.)

Mood disorders: Is a disorder where the mood is altered or there is a disturbance in the persons mood. This disorder is more prevalent in women; where w Women are twice as likely to develop mood disorders than men (Durand & Barlow, 2006).
 * I struck the first sentence because the term is already defined at the beginning of the Mood disorder article. The first part of the second sentence seems unnecessary to me. But the point about prevalence in women is well worth making. Are you citing "Abnormal Psychnow-Essentials of Abnormal Psychology + Casebook in Abnormal Psychology + Essentials of Abnormal Psychology" by Durand and Barlow? What is the page number?

Paranoid schizophrenia: Paranoid schizophrenia is the most common type of schizophrenia (Coon, 2006). It is the accumulation of depression and paranoia. Symptoms’ often include the normal depressive symptoms with an experience of paranoid thoughts. Delusions are often more odd and the individual may be quite sceptical and disbelieving. They often form the conclusion that others are “out to get them”.
 * The article already says "It is the most common type of schizophrenia" but it needs a citation. Which Coon (2006) are you using, and what page/s?

Suicide: Is a persons deliberate attempt at taking their own lives. If this attempt fails however, it is deemed attempted or Para suicide (Retterstøl, 1993). It is often chance factors that result in the individual dieing or not. Sometimes however, the person may have feelings of loneliness and could set up a suicide knowing that they will be found mid-action and saved. This is known as atypical and is often an individuals cry for help.
 * The article already contains this information.

Thought insertion: Is the idea that another thinks through the mind of the patient. The patient may sometimes be unable to distinguish between their own thoughts and those inserted into their minds. People who are diagnosed with this disorder is found to be convinced of their beliefs and unwilling to accept such diagnosis. (Amador & David, 2004)
 * The article needs more content, so I'm glad you've chosen this. I prefer your first sentence to the article's. Can you provide page number/s for each of the your assertions? I'm assuming you're using "Insight and psychosis".

Psychomotor retardation: In relation to schizophrenia shifts in moods may differ from psychomotor retardation to agitation. Therefore the patient will experience times of lifelessness and may be unresponsive and then the next moment be active and energetic. (Tryon, 1991)
 * The article doesn't even mention it is found in schizophrenia, so this will be a useful addition. Are you citing page 66 of "Activity measurement in psychology and medicine", or is it better summarised in one of your textbooks?

Blunted affect: People diagnosed with this disorder often endure a chronic course of blunted affect with the onset being subtle yet dangerous. (Waldinger, 2005)


 * Another excellent choice. The article has no citations. Which Waldinger publication are you referring to?

Barbiturate overdose: If a patient is discovered early before the patient develops shock the effects of such an overdose can be harmless. (Doweiko, 2009)
 * Looks to me like a fine addition to the article.

Seclusion: In relation to administering med’s seclusion is a tactic devised for those unwilling to proceed with instructions. Patients who are secluded due to aggressive behaviour should not be restrained to seclusion nor medication to calm them instead of restraint measures. Other measures, such as behavioural therapy, should be considered when assessing the care of the patient. (Stoff, Breiling & Maser 1997)
 * Looks like a positive contribution to a weak article.

Lyonsm9 (talk) 10:46, 9 December 2010 (UTC)Lyonsm9Lyonsm9 (talk) 10:46, 9 December 2010 (UTC)
 * Good work indeed. Can you please create citations for the above compositions? It is very easy to do. Just paste the Google Books URL into here and past the text it gives you (at the bottom of the page) into your composition. I have made one for Thought insertion. Well done, and sorry about the delay getting back to you. Anthony (talk) 08:20, 12 December 2010 (UTC)

Thank you very much indeed Anthony,I shall work on these over the next couple of days and forward them to you as soon as I can. They are due this Friday so I may dive into them. Much consideration for your time, Lyonsm9 (talk) 13:08, 12 December 2010 (UTC)Lyonsm9Lyonsm9 (talk) 13:08, 12 December 2010 (UTC)

Made my first edit: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Suicide_prevention#Mental_health_interventions Am I correct ? Lyonsm9 (talk) 13:39, 12 December 2010 (UTC)\
 * Looks good. I've removed the inline citation - no longer necessary with the footnote citation.

My second: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mania#Classification I won't continue until you approve. Lyonsm9 (talk) 13:56, 12 December 2010 (UTC)lyonsm9Lyonsm9 (talk) 13:56, 12 December 2010 (UTC)
 * This one needs work. Mania is a state or symptom, rather than a diagnosis/disorder; and it is possible to have mania without depressive episodes - as in some cases of bipolar 1. If you want to proceed with Mania I think you'll need to be clearer about what it is you're adding to the article. Perhaps you could work through the others and come back to Mania later. Anthony (talk) 14:43, 12 December 2010 (UTC)

No problemo, I shall continue on editing and I will paste them for you here so you are updated. Thanks again. Think I'm getting the hang of it. Lyonsm9 (talk) 23:07, 12 December 2010 (UTC)lyonsm9Lyonsm9 (talk) 23:07, 12 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mood_disorder#Origin Lyonsm9 (talk) 23:20, 12 December 2010 (UTC)Lyonsm9Lyonsm9 (talk) 23:20, 12 December 2010 (UTC)
 * Can I suggest moving this to a new section near the bottom of the article per Wikipedia medical manual of style, entitled

Epidemiology
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Thought_insertion There appears to be a cite error is that due to there being no Ref List? http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Blunted_affect Lyonsm9 (talk) 23:43, 12 December 2010 (UTC)Lyonsm9Lyonsm9 (talk) 23:43, 12 December 2010 (UTC) http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Barbiturate_overdose Lyonsm9 (talk) 00:05, 13 December 2010 (UTC)Lyonsm9Lyonsm9 (talk) 00:05, 13 December 2010 (UTC) http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Psychomotor_retardation Lyonsm9 (talk) 00:11, 13 December 2010 (UTC)Lyonsm9Lyonsm9 (talk) 00:11, 13 December 2010 (UTC)
 * This all looks fine to me. Good going. Anthony (talk) 08:54, 13 December 2010 (UTC)

Thanks. Did as instructed above with the heading. Heres another: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Seclusion Lyonsm9 (talk) 21:39, 13 December 2010 (UTC)Lyonsm9Lyonsm9 (talk) 21:39, 13 December 2010 (UTC)

Put my Ref in as you asked for defintion and furthered the content- http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Paranoid_schizophrenia Lyonsm9 (talk) 21:53, 13 December 2010 (UTC)Lyonsm9Lyonsm9 (talk) 21:53, 13 December 2010 (UTC)

Pressure of speech: Can lead to the development of a stutter. The persons need or pressure to speak causes them to involuntarily stutter. Therefore the persons need to express themselves is great yet they are too frustrated or distracted to do so and if persistent may become chronic. - I was thinking of doing this instead of Mania? Lyonsm9 (talk) 22:22, 13 December 2010 (UTC)Lyonsm9Lyonsm9 (talk) 22:22, 13 December 2010 (UTC) And finally (YAY!) is this ok: Parasuicide: Is an act often undertaken by a person in hope that it influences a reaction from a friend or family member. Lyonsm9 (talk) 22:35, 13 December 2010 (UTC)Lyonsm9Lyonsm9 (talk) 22:35, 13 December 2010 (UTC)

Sorry Anthony, but I want to submit these Edits tomorrow so I am going to go ahead with these. I hope they are ok. I will get up early in the morning and if you have written back I will get feedback then. Thanks again for all your help!! Kind regards Lyonsm9 (talk) 21:02, 16 December 2010 (UTC)Lyonsm9Lyonsm9 (talk) 21:02, 16 December 2010 (UTC)


 * Sorry, I didn't notice this last change until now. Nice job. Anthony (talk) 03:55, 17 December 2010 (UTC)