User:MAStudentBrown/Rose Daughter/ElleEverly8 Peer Review

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Lead
Lead section has relevant information. It is a small section with two sentences. I know other Wikipedia pages, including ones for novels, have larger lead paragraphs that include an overview of the entire page for people who may be seeking a quick answer. May consider adjusting.

Content
Majority of the sandbox includes sections on plot summary, editions, and critical reception. It is difficult to notice what they have changed or added, since it does not include any features like bold or strikethrough. However, the differences I did make out seem to help a lot with wordiness. One sentence does seem to be incomplete though: '''"which neither of the merchant nor his three daughters but are told by the townspeople that they are rose bushes". The word "sells" should be changed to "sell". Maybe change "for his debts" to "to pay for his debts".''' Some transitional phrases in the "Plot Summary" section are missing commas. This sentence could be revised to avoid a run-on: "Beauty is distressed to have missed so much of her sisters' lives and begs Beast to be allow her to return home to visit, which he grants on the condition that if she does not return to him by placing a petal on her tongue before the last petal falls from the rose he gives her, he will die". Consider rewording this sentence for better understanding: "Told that their names would be spoken throughout the land if she chooses the former, she asks how they will be spoken, and on hearing that it would be in fear and dread, she chooses the latter option." All adjustments are relevant and helpful for reader understanding.

Tone and Balance
Tone is neutral and does not waver to one point of view. There are not viewpoints that are under or over represented.

Sources and References
Four out of the eight sources are from the late 90's to the early 2000's. There are also links to the CFM publishing gallery and the author, McKinley's blog. All available links work. Content accurately reflects what the sources say.

Images and Media
There are no images or media uploaded in the sandbox.