User:MAderinsola/Pornography addiction/IIT JPeters Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

MAderinsola


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:MAderinsola/Pornography_addiction?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Pornography addiction

Evaluate the drafted changes
Great work overall, your writing style is very consistent and in line with Wikipedia standards. Including the effects of C19 was a great addition, especially given the increase in internet time for most people. I'm not sure you can say that porn/masturbation compulsion probably exist in the last line of the second to last paragraph under "Diagnostic Status", despite my agreement, I don't know if those claims are appropriate for Wikipedia. Adding three subheadings to treatment really increases the coverage of the page from where it stood before. Overall your contributions smooth out the page as a whole and I can see lots of this work being accepted into the page.