User:MD092022/Dimer (chemistry)/JellyfishFan Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? MD092022


 * Link to draft you're reviewing https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:MD092022/Dimer_%28chemistry%29
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)Dimer (chemistry)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)Dimer (chemistry)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

General Feedback
Sources - Article wants additional sources, did you add those sources?

Sources are live

Check to see if you can link to other wikipedia articles wherever possible

eg. Organoaluminium chemistry

Tone - tone seems good overall

Original article - Article overall probably requires copyediting so a good idea to check that too rather than just making your additions.

Order - seems good

Additions -

Section Feedback
Lead - doesn't appear to be updated, remember to update the lead once you're close to completition.

Inorganic dimers - Group 13, will you add the other groups? Do other groups dimer?

Boranes - add images or a chemicalcal equation of the structures you refer to for easy visual reference (including B2H6, perhaps also with BH3)

Might be a bit low on citations, if the same citation can link more than once in the paragraph or add new citations.

"Classic example" -> true but why? Is it the simplest inorganic dimer, the most used, the first derived? This information would be more valuable.

Aluminium - Mentiones bulkier groups - how bulky? Anything larger than an ethyl? See if you can add quanitifiable information here, such as angles or molecular size specifications.

Any other metals? Either add sections about them, one section to cover them all if they're similar or if they don't dimer, add a note about that as well.

Again, pictures/equations are your friend here! Show a dimer and a monomer.

Biochemical dimers

Pictures/equations are your friend! For specific examples feel free to add pictures.

Pyrimidine Dimers Really clear explanation, good wikipedia linking, nice use of referencing, wonderful mimickery of the neutral tone of wikipedia writing

Protein dimers

Cut out "another form of biochemical dimers are" unlike an esasy wikiepdia paragraphs can exist somewhat independently. Mimic the pryrimidine paragraph and just jump right in with "Protein dimers arise..."

What about the asymmetric case? Is there anything to add?

G protein-coupled Receptors

Very good! Nice wiki-style writing and use of neutral language and referencing of scientific terms.

Put citation 6 at the end of the sentence, even though its for a point earlier in it reads better at the end.

Receptor Tyrosine Kinase

"their function" seems a bit "non-brogan," can you explain what function that is in a few words? Can you cut it out without effecting the meaning of the sentence? If not, fine to leave it as is.

Can get rid of "ultimately" and "namely" it makes the writing flow but not necessary.

Can also get rid of "like many other receptors" talking about dimers not necessarily other receptors, interesting comment but not on topic.

Reading it over could delete mention of the three domains (off-topic) then mention that dimerization "activates the cytoplasmic kinase domains that are responsible for further signal transduction".

Just trying to get at that the last section could be reworded for clarity and to be more concise. (Quality over quantity).