User:MJ Fielder-Jellsey/Teotihuacan/Obergj Peer Review

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I think the edits to the lead are good and make it clearer however maybe consider getting rid of/re working the sentence "Other scholars have suggested that Teotihuacan was multi-ethnic, due to the discovery of cultural aspects connected to the Maya as well as Oto-Pamean people. " The next sentence, It is clear that many different..., slightly contradicts the tone of the former, which is more tentative vs definitive, but it it fits if you reword one of them to match the other.

For your three new paragraphs in population they look pretty good. I don't know how hard it would be to reword your first paragraph talking about the other two neighborhoods in order to place it above the paragraph focusing on Teopancazco but it might make the section flow a bit better. Beyond that the only thing that may need to be reworded is the parenthetical statement, (or perhaps more research needs to be done), in the Barrio de los Comerciantes section as it feels a bit tonally off compared to the rest of the article.