User:MNC-2016/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
African-American LGBT community

Male prostitution

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
The class I am taking is Black Sexual Politics which is relevant to the African American LGBT community.

This article is chosen one for class project.

Evaluate the article
Lead Section


 * Adequate general overview of African American LGBT community
 * Use of LGBT is outdated, LGBTQ+ is current language
 * Important figure to discuss is Miss Major

Content


 * Much more info can be added to post-Stonewall riot section
 * Adding more states to the section about Black trans people (highlight stresses, rates of suicide and homicide, rate of sex work in that community)
 * Represents historically underrepresented population
 * Cultural section can be added on (Kiki, Black gay pride, intro of current culture)

Tone and Balance


 * Article is neutral
 * Many sentences seem clunky and need improvement
 * Shows issues community faces without trying to persuade acceptance

Sources and References


 * Pop-up at top of page indicates sources need improvement (bare URLs and link rot)
 * Many links bring up “page not found”

Organization and Writing Quality


 * Concise and clear for the most part
 * Many sentences are clunky and need improvements
 * Article is well organized

Images and Media


 * Images and media are relevant and captioned well

Talk Page


 * Seems appropriate for the main article

Overall


 * Needs general updating of current language use and more current events
 * Well-developed just needs improvement
 * Strong in historical background of African American LGBT community
 * Male prostitution Lead article
 * Need to take out info on monkeypox and covid
 * Need for language clarity, more commas, less “ands” Terminology
 * Tone and balance are solid
 * Content is relevant
 * Perhaps additional terms needed for more recent terminology
 * Flesh out more than just one source  Intro to prostitution
 * No need for the last paragraph about parents
 * Tone and balance are well developed
 * Could use more than two sources History
 * Could talk about male sex work in Islam ancient culture and not only Christianity
 * Paragraph about early US prostitution could include indigenous cultures, doesn’t clarify who these people are
 * Expansion of baccha in history
 * Examples of gay publications early post-Stonewall Clients of male sex workers
 * Discussion of payments in early history (was it money only? equivalent amount paid to today's standard?)
 * “Overall, the rent boy…” can be changed to sex worker/prostitute, feels less objectifying
 * Discussion of client characteristics in different cultures (non-Western)
 * Differentiate between sex workers and sugar babies in friendship and support  Regulation
 * Explanation of disregard from law enforcement initially
 * Explanation of lesser sentences than women
 * Why was lesbian age of consent already 16 when homosexual was 18?
 * Citations need verification in US portion
 * Discussion of what societal view was about the men who paid for sex in early 20’s paragraph
 * Flesh out more on how HIV/AIDS epidemic affected regulation and in general overall
 * Societal opinion on WHO calling for decriminalization  Present-day male prostitution
 * Discussion of onlyfans in the online portion and how very modern-day sex work practices have affected profession overall
 * Red light districts can be talked about
 * Legality of public toilets and parks
 * Discussion of current plans for male brothels in Nevada
 * Discussion of STI spreading in sex tourism to the tourists (rates)
 * Discussion of less pronounced social disdain in historical periods in history section of article– needs more than one sentence on topic  Help and support for male sex workers
 * Not much need for improvement
 * Inclusion of other programs if possible  Feminist studies
 * More than one study can be talked about
 * Not much more needed Pop culture
 * Current portrayals need adding (latest addition to this is from 2011)
 * More than one study can be talked about
 * Not much more needed Pop culture
 * Current portrayals need adding (latest addition to this is from 2011)