User:MNC-2016/Male prostitution/YSL123 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

MNC-2016, Bem2c4, Elaineamery


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Male prostitution


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

There are two sections at the top of the article that could be combined because it is essentially talking about the same things the term male prostitution and the working patterns of male prostitutes.

Content:

Most of the content added were grammar and grammatical errors which is very relevant for the reads to make things more readable. In a way the article is about an underrepresented population because we don't hear much about male prostitutes. The section that takes about the "introduction of prostitution" should be changed to "introduction of male prostitution" to make it more specific to the topic.

Tone:

It's noticeable in this article that different sections were written by different people. Some sections sound informative while others sound descriptive.

Sources:

Some sources can be traced back to newspaper articles that can be seen as not as reliable as a scholarly or book source.

organization:

The article does not look cohesive. some sections can be combined, other sections just need to be revised and added to. While may grammatical errors have been fixed there is still sentence fragments and some grammatical errors.

Images/ Media

I think the pictures can be put into better places like the picture depicting a painting of male prostitution can be moved the the history section. Also the section talking about the "introduction of prostitution" should add a picture about what that looks like today.