User:MOIN2022/To Live (novel)/Lydialzy Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

MOIN2022


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:MOIN2022/To_Live_%28novel%29?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * To Live (novel)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

The Lead has not been updated to reflect the new content added by peer. The lead that on the article is same like the old article. I think it can add some informations that about synopsis section on content part.

Yes, the Lead includes an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic. The lead talk about the article is about a novel. The novel name is To Live.

No, the Lead includes a brief description of the article's major sections. In the lead, it includes a simple description about the novel have a movie. And in the content there is a section about the To Live movie.

The the Lead is not very concise, because the lead has four different parts, and each parts have more than 2-3 sentences. For each section can try only 2-3 sentences to make it concise.

Content

Yes, the content added relevant to the topic. In the article, there is a new section call synopsis. All the informations from this section are about the topic. This section is add to talk about the details of each chapter of the novel. The new content add to show what each chapter in the novel are talking about. And in the new article inspiration and background section, they have more details than before.

Yes, the content added up-to-date.

There are no content that is missing or content that does not belong.

It does not address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics.

Tone and Balance

I think the content added neutral.

There are not have any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position.

There are not have viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented.

Sources and References

Yes, all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information, it uses different source to write about the novel's information.

Yes, the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say.

The sources are thorough because they reflect the available literature on the topic. And the sources are current. Most of the sources are from 2021 or 2022.

I tried all the link, and the links are working.

Organization

Yes, the content added well-written. Each section is concise, and easy to understand. I can know what is each section about. The content does not have any grammatical or spelling errors. And the content added well-organized because it broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic.

Overall impressions

The content is added improved the overall quality of the article, because the article have a new part that call synopsis. This part is include what is talking about in each chapter. This can make people who did not read this novel before, know what is the novel about. The article are more complete, because it add the new section. But the section only wrote to the chapter 3. It can continue to work on the synopsis.

It do have strengths of the content added, because the synopsis is not finish. It can keep add new information on this part.

The the article follows the patterns of other similar articles, because it have any necessary infoboxes, and any other features contained within similar articles. And has section headings. The content can have more details on it. And can try to make the lead more concise.