User:MPS2023/Constructivism (ethnic politics)/Nbeyli Peer Review

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MPS2023


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 * Constructivism (ethnic politics)
 * Constructivism (ethnic politics)

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead is relevant and brief, and gives a good introduction to the theory of Constructivism. The first sentence is clear and gives the reader a good idea of what the article will be about. However, including the Chewa-Tumbuka as an example seems overly detailed, especially when there are other examples of constructivism in your article.

In the section called "Voting Behavior", I would recommend switching the positions of the first two sentences so that your topic sentence is more general, and doesn't reference the case study of Bulgaria right off the bat.

I would recommend the same thing for "Party Structure".

You may consider adding more sources, not just with examples of specific countries but opposing views to Chandra and Posner, might strengthen your credibility and act against bias.