User:MRR1993/Environmental issues with coral reefs/Annsli.Hilton Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Heath, Peyton, MRR, and Polydeuces


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:MRR1993/Environmental_issues_with_coral_reefs?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Environmental issues with coral reefs

Evaluate the drafted changes
Oil impacts on Coral Reef Communities Overall a very good section with valuable information about oil pollution. I found the part about oil spills affecting the thinking of fish particularly interesting. My advice is to fix some of the wording throughout your paragraph to me it sounds a little funky in places.

-" The ship was estimated to be carrying 4:9 million barrels of crude oil that was then spilled into the Gulf of Mexico" > "The ship was estimated to have been carrying 4.9 million barrels of crude oil that spilled into the Gulf of Mexico." Also link gulf of mexico.

-"Just a few drops from oil can cause coral reef fish to make poor decisions" > "Just a few drops of oil... "

-Link Deep water horizon if possible.

-Remove any fluff sentences; the paragraph sounds slightly wordy and repetitive.

- Fix your references, the red text after them indicates there is something wrong. Make sure you don't link to galileo or any subscription based service.

Oil Impacts on Coral Reef Structure This section provided lots of good information regarding coral skeletons. Providing more information about gorgonian corals in the second paragraph would be beneficial as the sections slightly short and I was wanting to know more.

- Link a few wiki pages like "macondo well" and "Deep water horizon"

Cause and effect of Oil Spills. This section is very detailed and provides lots of good information about oil spills, however the wiki page is about environmental issues with coral reefs specifically and I feel like that was already addressed in the two sections above. I would recommend picking another topic like ocean acidification, recreation or something like that. Overall I feel like this section would be better suited for a wikipedia page about oil spills.

-However I think this section could fit in this wikipedia page if you add it to the top of the oil spill section and add more information about the effects on coral reefs specifically. Take out any information that does not talk about coral reefs like your sentence about birds.

-Gundlach, E. R., & Hayes, M. O. (1978). Vulnerability of coastal environments to oil spill impacts. Marine technology society Journal, 12(4), 18-27. This paper talks about how the depth of coral reefs changes the effects of oil spills and it may be useful for your section.

- Add links to other wiki pages like "fouling" and "oil toxicity"

Oil cleanup Methods While this section provides lots of useful information about the process of cleaning up oil spills. However the first paragraph is better suited for a wikipedia page about oil spills. Keep your information contained to environmental issues with coral reefs and specifically how to clean up oil off of reefs. Rather than provide the definition for cleanup methods link to other wikipedia pages that would include that information.

Fragoso ados Santos, H., Duarte, G., Rachid, C. et al. Impact of oil spills on coral reefs can be reduced by bioremediation using probiotic microbiota. Sci Rep 5, 18268 (2015). https://doi.org/10.1038/srep18268. This paper talks about the use of probiotic bacteria trained to degrade water soluble oil fractions may be an interesting addition to your section.

-Link to other wiki pages like microbial biosurfactants and other clean up methods.

Overall good job on the wikipedia page just stay on topic. Annsli Hilton