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Alexandra Adler


 * Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?
 * Yes, everything the article is relevant, however nothing is very detailed and not much information is present in general. There is one odd sentence that names her sister and seems out of place.
 * Is the article neutral? Are there any claims, or frames, that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * Yes the article is neutral, it is all within the realm of her life and accomplishments.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * This article mainly includes underrepresentation of everything. It is almost empty. It does give a good amount of information on her career, but overall does not contain much information.
 * Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?
 * Yes the links work and they are supporting the article
 * Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?
 * Yes they all come from relevant journals on her work
 * Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added?
 * The most recent information is a reprint of a article she wrote in that was published in 2013. Could use a more recent article about her
 * Check out the Talk page of the article. What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic?
 * The talk page mainly includes messages about how much information is missing and I agree.
 * How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects?
 * This article is related to a few projects pertaining to Medicine, Women Scientists, and neurology.
 * How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?
 * We talk about using different sources and information to get a well rounded article on the person, not enough information is present and there is so much to be added.

Sources -

1) Guiding human misfits [electronic resource] : a practical application of individual psychology

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International journal of individual psychology

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Women neuropsychiatrists on Wagner-Jauregg's staff in Vienna at the time of the Nobel award: ordeal and fortitude.

>ADLER A. ONE HUNDRED CASES OF A CONDITION DIAGNOSED AS ACUTE ENCEPHALITIS: A CLINICOPATHOLOGIC STUDY. Arch NeurPsych. 1940;44(3):541–567. doi:10.1001/archneurpsyc.1940.02280090060005

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Peer Review


 * 1) Information was conveyed well. The medical studies section was particularly interesting and well written.
 * 2) I would remove the “possibly” from the “she immigrated to the United States possibly due to the rise of fascism in Europe “ bit as it sounds like assumptions are being made. Or just remove that bit entirely if there isn’t supporting material. There is also a missing word in the section about PTSD research “It would theorized” should be “It would be theorized”
 * 3) Expansion. There doesn’t seem to be much about Adler’s early or late life.
 * 4) I could stand to organize things a bit better. The differences between an article about a person and an article about a building makes apply things difference.  ~

Response To Peer Review
MstGolf2021 (Talk) 11:28, 2 April 2021 (UTC) Peer review response

As notes above in the peer review I will make sure to give a more concrete explanation of how Alder immigrated to the U.S. and I will make the correction to the sentence that says "It would theorized."

Next steps for the article is to give more information about early childhood life, and later research and life achievements. More sources will be added to get this information as well. Most of the research thus far has been about her medical career.

Finny1217 (talk) 04:02, 3 April 2021 (UTC)Additional response

Thanks for the great suggestions. For the possible fascism comment, I added that to possibly research it later and if there wasn't a lead, delete it. We will definitely look into it later.

We are for sure looking more into later life and early life for our next big addition to the article, followed by a much better organization.

Career
MstGolf2021 (Sandbox) 15:43, 14 March 2021 (UTC) information on her career

In 1934, Adler was in charge of a child guidance center in Vienna. After the closing of the establishment in 1935 she immigrated to the United States possibly due to the rise of fascism in Europe and took a position at Harvard Medical School as a professor as one of the first women on staff. Because of Harvard's policy on no women on regular faculty, she was instead given a renewable one year contract. Also in 1935, she established the Journal of Psychology. In 1938, Adler became the medical director of the Alfred Adler Clinic.

Finny1217 (talk) 02:38, 15 March 2021 (UTC)Added some extra information from the same article to make the career page more detailed. Could definitely be reworded to add some extra content in later.

Medical Studies
MstGolf2021 (Sandbox) 17:13, 10 March 2021 (UTC) Study about encephalitis

From 1928 to 1938, Alexandra Adler conducted an investigation of known cases of encephalitis or encephalomyelitis at the Boston City Hospital. The study included over 100 patients, and were only admitted to the study if encephalitis was the sole illness of the individual. The aim of the study was to contribute knowledge for these diseases.

MstGolf2021 (Sandbox) 11:40, 16 April 2021 (UTC) Study about MS

In 1937, Adler conducted a study along with the Harvard Neurosurgeon Tracy Jackson Putnam research multiple sclerosis. The study resulted in new information on how the disease affected the human body, with a post-mortem study on the brain of a patient diagnosed with the disease.

MstGolf2021 (Sandbox) 12:40, 9 March 2021 (UTC) Study about PTSD

In 1943 Adler studied survivors of the Coconut Grove nightclub fire of 1942. The study found that 50% of the survivors still experienced trauma and disturbances a year after the accident. These symptoms included changes in personality such as lack of sleep, anxiety, guilt and fears of the event. It was also studied that survivors were only recognizing parts of what happened. It would theorized that it was due to the stress or a possible lesion in the brain due to carbon monoxide exposure. Adler became one of the first neurologists to create a detailed documentation of what is known as post traumatic stress disorder.

Peer Review by Sourya M
The draft is well structured in that it goes in chronological order when talking about her career. Nice list of achievements/ milestones in her career so far. Medical study section has a nice interesting paragraph on an important study done by Adler.

I suggest you change the sentence in the career section about her “possibly” moving to Europe because of growing facism in Europe unless you have solid proof this is a reason why she moved. Also quoting after every sentence should be done for this paragraph. Also in this section consider rephrasing- “Because of Harvard's policy on no women on regular faculty,...” to ``Because of Harvard’s policy, that no women could be on regular faculty,...”. Also “automatically” doesn't make sense to me in the next sentence, maybe take that word out. In the Medical studies section maybe try to add more substance to the study on encephalitis, similar to how in the  Coconut Grove nightclub fire study paragraph you clearly state the specific outcome of the study and how it connects to Adler, how she benefited from it.

The most important thing that could be done is to find more sources, if possible, and make sure to cite them after each sentence.

That last paragraph on the Coconut Grove study, its structure, wording, and how it all comes full circle in expressing an important study done by Adler and its benefits is very well done. I will be trying to apply this type of paragraph to my own article.

Response To Peer Review
MstGolf2021 (Talk) 11:36, 2 April 2021 (UTC) Peer review response

The suggestion about the immigration to the united states section will be changed with more detailed information on the topic from the source. I have now made the change two the two sentences described with grammatical error.

Thank you for the additional feedback about adding more information to the study field, and putting emphasis on the outcome of the experiments and the affect on Alder. I will put more research into those topics to try and branch it out.

The next steps are definitely adding more sources and a wider range of information on Alexandra Adler.

Finny1217 (talk) 04:02, 3 April 2021 (UTC)additional response

I like the comment on her immigration. That is my bad, I should have had that as a comment for future research instead of an addition to the section.

Right now for additions, we are looking for early life and late life, but I believe looking into more of the outcomes of the experiments is now going to be a good part of our additions.

For grammar, we need to a better job together to catch each others mistakes. With two editing, it shouldn't be an issue and we will make sure these mistakes are less frequent.

Finny1217 (talk) 02:48, 14 March 2021 (UTC)additional comments on her other studies over her life

In the 1950's and throughout the 60's, Adler continued her father's work of Adlerian psychology for possible treatments for schizophrenia, neuroses, and personality disorders. She believed this could be done through modern drug treatment, group therapy, and the existentialist and religious psychotherapies. Finny1217 (talk) 15:12, 19 March 2021 (UTC)Made a few more additions to the paragraph to get ready for the peer review