User:MaMaGaoSuWoYongHuMingBieQiTaiChang/Butyryl-CoA/Xiang Li(Gary) Peer Review

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 * User:MaMaGaoSuWoYongHuMingBieQiTaiChang/Butyryl-CoA
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Butyryl-CoA

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

Lead has been updated, but no new content has been added, making it look more concise. Lead begins with a concise and clear sentence that introduces the topic effectively, providing readers with a solid understanding of the subject matter right from the start. Lead contains a brief overview of the article's major sections, allowing readers to grasp the structure and key focus areas of the content. There is no information in Lead that isn't present in the article. Lead is concise, presenting essential information without delving into overly detailed explanations, which makes it accessible and informative without overwhelming the reader.

Content：

The content added by the author is relevant to his topic, and it is written in great detail with pictures and references, which can help readers understand the content more quickly. Focus on its biochemistry, biological functions, and importance in metabolic pathways. The added content is the latest. At present, the article mainly focuses on key information about butyl CoA, but lacks content introduction on Beta Oxidation and Fatty acid synthesis, and there is no content that does not belong to it.The topic of Butyryl-CoA and its involvement in processes like beta-oxidation, fatty acid synthesis, fermentation, and GABA degradation does not directly address Wikipedia's equity gaps or topics related to historically underrepresented populations. These subjects are more focused on fundamental biochemical processes and metabolic pathways.

Tone and Balance

The content added by the author is neutral, stating facts and not biased towards any specific viewpoint. There is no clear statement indicating bias towards specific positions. The added information focuses on factual content related to the biochemical effects and significance of butyryl CoA. The improved content will not overly represent or underestimate specific viewpoints. It aims to provide a comprehensive overview of acetyl CoA based on scientific knowledge (but the content is not comprehensive, only partial). There is no indication that the content has increased attempts to persuade readers to accept specific viewpoints. The purpose of enhancing functionality is to provide information and expand on this topic, rather than convincing. In summary, the balance of the newly added content by the author is excellent. The added content is neutral, but incomplete. I hope the author can fill in the missing content so that they can make better judgments.

Sources and References

The newly added references are very reliable and the information is very comprehensive. All the references are related to his topic and are the latest sources. The sources are all written by different authors. The sources he searched for were all very detailed explanations of each definition, and they were all very good sources. And every link can work.Organization

The improved content is well written, concise, highly readable, and very clear. Additionally, the author has added additional images to help readers understand what he has written. No obvious grammar or spelling errors were observed in the added content. The organization of the content has been carefully considered, and the information has been broken down into clearly defined parts, reflecting the key points related to butyryl CoA (although some content is missing). This structured approach helps to effectively navigate topics.

Images and Media

The new images added to the article enhance the understanding of the topic. The information in the images is very comprehensive and complete, making it easy for readers to understand the author's point of view. The image titles are correct and comply with Wikipedia's copyright regulations. The author's newly added images are visually appealing, but it would be nice if the images were smaller. The content in the image is very concise, but expressed in great detail and with clear ideas.

Overall impressions

For the overall impression of this modification, first of all, I think the new content he added is very detailed, with detailed references to the content he wants to explain, good image analysis, and clear explanations, which is great for readers. However, the article is not complete and lacks other parts, which may confuse readers. We hope to make the content incomplete, so that readers can better understand this article. Secondly, I believe that adding too many citations to a word may cause confusion for readers when understanding it. Choosing the most reasonable citation is a wise choice. Adding too many references can make the entire article appear somewhat confusing. It is good to explain the definition in detail, but being too detailed can actually mislead readers (especially those who are not good at this field).

Response to peer review
Dear Xiang Li:

Thank you for the throughout feedbacks on my article draft, butyryl-CoA. I've incorporated your suggestions into the revisions I made. Below is a summary of the changes I've implemented, along with responses to each of your suggestions:

For the lead part:
Thank you for the feedback and constructive comments on my lead! However, I wanted to clarify that I did add information stating that butyryl-CoA is "organic" and mentioned its presence as a natural product (also as an intermediate) in most pathways. I appreciate your remarks regarding its conciseness. In comparison to the original, I have adjusted some phrasings and omitted sections that were not addressed further in the body.

For the body part:
Thank you for positive comments on the images I added! Additionally, I have added new content on beta oxidation and fatty acid synthesis, renaming them as fatty acid degradation and fatty acid elongation. I then merged these two sections into one titled "fatty acid metabolism."

I appreciate your observation regarding the article not addressing equity gaps. However, I believe the article itself does not directly relate to these topics. There might be possible aspects. For example, I could have added a historical section where I can potentially explain how butyryl-CoA was initially discovered and discuss the scientists involved, which may relate to topics in equity gaps. But I didn't have enough time, so I ended up without addressing equity gaps.

Thank you for your feedback on the biochemical process being fundamental! This topic is classified by Wiki as "only of interest to experts." Nevertheless, I have endeavored to simplify the content to enhance its accessibility for readers who are not experts in this field.

Tone and Balance
Thank you for noting that my overall tone is neutral! I made an effort to browse through many literature, writing to find something that had contradictory findings regarding butyryl-CoA and its associated reactions. However, I found that all the sources I came across were in agreement with each other. Then I summarized these findings as the consensus. Additionally, since the topic is not classified as controversial, this significantly contributed to maintaining a neutral tone. I have also addressed the incomplete sections. Thanks once again for the reminder.

Sources and References
Thank you for the detailed feedback on the dates and comprehensiveness of my sources. I made sure to cite each statement in the article to enhance its reliability. This also helped readers to study more if they are interested. Additionally, I expanded the range of sources to include various authors, journals, releasing date, and institutions. Unfortunately, despite attempting to search for secondary sources, I mainly found primary sources, which were more readily available.

I appreciate your comments on the grammar and organization. I devoted significant time to formatting, including adding different types of headings. Furthermore, I reorganized the placement of images to make this more aesthetically appealing. I also linked as many jargons as possible to existing Wiki articles, to aid reader's understanding.

Images and Media
Thank you for positive comments on the images I added! However, I realized that the previously added images were not under the Creative Commons license, and I did not have copyright for them. So, I recreated these pictures myself and uploaded them as the author. When recreating these images, I've changed butanoyl-CoA into butyryl-CoA for consistency, as the article name is butyryl-CoA. I've also adjusted the size of images to make them fit better.

Overall impressions
Once again, thank you for all the constructive feedback! To summarize the changes I've made, I finalized the fatty acid metabolism section, revised the lead, provided additional details in the regulation section, and recreated the images with legal copyrights. I've planned to strike a balance between conciseness, making it accessible to those who's unfamiliar with the topic, and including detailed explanations and technical terminology for professionals seeking in-depth information. However, I soon realized that the primary audience would likely consist of experts or individuals interested in this field, rather than the general public. As a result, I adjusted the balance to provide more detailed information, while avoiding excessive detail. So it doesn't confuse the general audience at first hand. But your suggestion was really critical and was greatly appreciated!

Thank you again for all the feedbacks!

Warm regards