User:Mackinacfudge/Abu Ghraib torture and prisoner abuse/Mnbvcxz1234567 Peer Review

Lead

The lead has been updated to refelct the new content of my peer, and the introductory sentence gives a good overview of what the article is about as a whole. The lead also includes an introduction to the mjor sections of the article through a coherent progressive discussion of the backfround and context of the the topic, and without irrelevant information in a concise fashion.

Content

The content added to the topics are relevant and up to date. It also addresses the gaps in coverage for prioners of war and detainees of governments who are subjected to unjust tratement and even torture, which rarely gets media light shown on it as it is a secretive practice. Content, additionally, is appropriately and coherently placed.

Tone and Balance

Added content is neutral, weighed towards the injusticed faced by the detainees without much from the side of the government, but with relevant and ample sourcing. I would say, again, that the governments statements and perspectives lack in comparison to the media coverage or statements made from detainees themselves, but considering the goal of the article is to explore the experiences of the detainees and not the government's rationale, I think it is acceptable. However, adding some of this in may help strengthen the balance of the article and support the content as well. Yet, the article is still balanced in the sense that it is not trying to persuade but rather simply presenting facts.

Sources and References

New content added has reliable and ample sources, and the new links work. The sournces, especially of the detainees themselves, are considerate and inclusive towards marginalized voices, and the aim of the aricle seeks to share their experiences and stories. However, more peer reviewed studies or investigations could be incorporated rather than first or second hand accounts to bolster the statements.

Organization

The article is well written, clear and concise. It's style is easy to follow, informative, and connected to the overall goal of the article. There are few grammar and spelling errors, which contributes to its clarity, along with the division into legible and easy to understand topic sections.

Images and Media

Ample amounts of informative and compelling images support this article. The images are well captioned as to inform the reader with what topic or section of the article they pertain to and what they are for context, and are laid our in a visually appealing way that also contributes to the flow of the article. From what I can see, they appear to follow the regulations as well.

Overall Impressionst

The new content did, in fact inmporve the overall quality, depth and clarity of the article. The strengths include the sources, images and flow, but I think there is still room for improvement in terms of follow up with the stories, as well as incorporating other perspectices.

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