User:Mackley25/Hot Peaches/Glasstoad Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mackley25


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Hot Peaches
 * Hot Peaches

Evaluate the drafted changes
It is good that you delve into the identities and roles of the notable members noted on the original page. It seems you have info in your sources to add to the overall description/goals of the group which will be very beneficial to the page.

Your sources are diverse and informative. I think all meet Wiki's notability requirements.

There's no images yet, but I do think you should continue to look for one like you have been. This group seems to be very graphic.

Your notes all seem to be in a neutral tone and I think this will reflect when you start to draft it into an article.

The structuring of your writing seems like it could go in a people or chronological way. Maybe you could find a way to splice these two sections together. Also I think that briefly delving into each individual notable persons a little bit within the article will be very nice

I think a major strength of your content will come from you talking about their interaction with all LGBT groups and people. It really emphasizes the community and impact this group had on it.

With the notes you have I think the article will be much better after your additions. It will be more cohesive and in depth regarding members and the group.