User:Maclainemary/Islamic ornament/LaurenM247 Peer Review

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Maclainemary


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 * Islamic ornament


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 * Islamic ornament

Evaluate the drafted changes
This looks great, MacLaine!

Your additions to the lead definitely make it more clear. The small additions to the other sections are also good, I think its great that you worked on the entire article.

In the part you added to the "Calligraphy" section, I would suggest you shorten the sentence "In the 10th century, the invention of a new approach to writing emerged." I think having "invention" and "new approach" in the same sentence is a bit redundant. But if it make sense to you, ignore me :)

In the last sentence of your first paragraph, you use "objet" instead of object.

In the section where you talk about arabesque, you could add a link to the arabesque page so readers could look further into it.

Do you have any images of the Alhambra you could add to that portion?

I love that you include the distinction between ornament being a filler vs ornament being its own important art. Everything you added was very well written and easy to understand. Great job!