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Peer Review for 2001 Indian Parliament attack.

I question the use of the word "perpetrators" in the lead article. It seems to have a biased connotation. Do we have proof that the attack directly caused the standoff between India and Pakistan? I agree that it likely increased tensions, however I am unsure of including the statement that this directly related to the standoff. It appears to be a large logical jump that may not entirely be true. The attack in "The attack" subheading needs to be capitalized as it is a heading. Also, the paragraph describing the attack needs to be revised as it has multiple grammatical errors and is unclear in some sections. This same section seems to use colloquial language, where it should be strictly professional. I would change several words and phrases to more formal words. In the "Victims" section, I would change "she died on the spot" to "she died instantly". There are many instances of slang being used in this article. I also would not use the phrase "shot dead" it is slang. Overall, the article seems to have a lot of information, however, it would benefit greatly from closer editing and better word choice. I would also expand more on the attack itself. I would appreciate it if they would link more information about the event to the article. I guarantee there are news articles or other writings that would help better illustrate the attack and its effect on the nations as a whole. I also would add more information about how the attack contributed to an escalation in tensions between India and Pakistan.

1.    Lead Section

a.      Popular Revolutionary Front for the Liberation of Palestine (Arabic: الجبهة الشعبية الثورية لتحرير فلسطين‎‎) was a Palestinian militant group. PRFLP was formed in February 1972, following a split from the Popular Front for the Liberation of Palestine.[1] Internal political strife had plagued the PFLP since the crackdowns on the Palestinian movements in Jordan after the conflict in Jordan known as Black September.
 * History
 * Overview
 * Black September
 * The fighting occurred between the Palestine Liberation Forces and the Jordanian Armed Forces, from September 27, 1970 to July 1971. After the death of thousands of people during the conflict, most of which were Palestinian, and after continuing terrorist attacks embarrassed Jordan due to widespread condemnation, all Palestinian fighters in Jordan, regardless of group affiliation, were expulsed from Jordan by King Hussein. The Palestinian fighters then fled to Lebanon. The left-wing of the PFLP blamed the ‘incompetence’ of ‘right-wing leadership’ of the PFLP for their defeat in Jordan. Not long after, the left-wing of the PFLP broke away to form the Popular Revolutionary Front for the Liberation of Palestine.
 * The history of the Popular Revolutionary Front for the Liberation of Palestine prior to the split from the Popular Front for the Liberation of Palestine\
 * Overview of the Popular Front for the Liberation of Palestine
 * The Popular Front for the Liberation of Palestine is a left-wing socialist terrorist group.
 * It was founded via a merge of the Movement of Arab Nationalists, the Palestine Liberation Front, Heroes of the Return and Vengeance Youth.
 * Founded in 1967
 * Leader – George Habash
 * Who sought to rival Arafat’s position in the Fatah, and to push the Palestinian nationalist movement towards Marxist-Leninist ideology.
 * Second-largest group forming the Palestinian Liberation Organization.
 * Beliefs
 * One-state solution
 * Anti-Israel
 * PFLP Charter
 * Revolutionary War is People’s War
 * Guerrilla War to Pressure for the “Peaceful Solution”
 * No Revolutionary War Without a Revolutionary Theory
 * The War of Liberation is a Class War Guided by a Revolutionary Ideology
 * The Main Field of Our Revolution Struggle is Palestine
 * Revolution in Both Regions of Jordan
 * The Black September Conflict in Jordan
 * The Black September conflict was a civil war fought between the PLO, which the PFLP was a part of, and the Hashemite monarchy"s Jordanian Armed Forces over the right to rule Jordan.
 * The PLO sought to establish a Palestinian "state within a state" in Jordan, and undermined the authority of Jordanian police. This angered King Hussein. The king then cracked down on the PLO, fearing the power of the Palestinian militias. The PLO tried, and failed to assassinate King Hussein multiple times on September 1, 1970.
 * Dawson's Field hijackings
 * The PFLP hijacked four planes, and were blown up after the hostages were removed.
 * The SwissAir and TWA jets were flown to Jordan
 * The Pan Am jet was flown to Cairo
 * Later, a BOAC flight to Bahrain was flown to Zarqa
 * On September 15th, 1970 the Jordanian Army launched an offensive against the Palestinian militants. This was the beginning of the civil war.
 * Conservative estimates claim that 1,000 to 2,000 Palestinians were killed as a result of the war
 * Arafat claimed that the Jordanian army killed between 10,000 and 25,000 Palestinians
 * The number of dead is hard to determine due to the absense of data about the Palestinians living in the area
 * After the Palestinian militants were defeated by the Jordanian Army, King Hussein ordered all Palestinian militants be removed from Jordan.
 * The Establishment of the Black September Organization
 * After the events of the Black September war in Jordan, Palestinian militants formed the terrorist organization, Black September. The Black September Organization existed to enact revenge upon Jordan, Israel and the West, and was most known for the Munich massacre in 1972, in which eleven Israeli Olympic team members were taken hostage and killed in Germany.
 * Internal Politics
 * The left-wing faction of the PFLP accused that the 'incompetence' of the 'right-wing leadership' of PFLP was to blame for the defeat.[2]
 * The politburo of the Arab Socialist Action Party was called in to mediate between the two fractions.[3]
 * In the end, the 'leftwing' tendency broke away and formed PRFLP.
 * Because the PFLP was an ideologically motivated group, it continually suffered from internal disagreements resulting from differing opinions. Some believed that they should be more left-wing, while others believed that they should align themselves more with the Fatah.
 * This internal strife gave rise to factions within the group, some of which split from the PFLP.
 * Some groups
 * PFLP-General Command, Organization of Arab Palestine, Popular Democratic Front for the Liberation of Palestine, Popular Revolutionary Front for the Liberation of Palestine
 * After the split from the Popular Front for the Liberation of Palestine
 * After seeing the worldwide condemnation for the terrorist attacks that the PFLP had conducted, the PRFLP sought to align itself with the mainstream Fatah.
 * However, the PRFLP still believed in never negotiating with Israel and rejected the more diplomatic view of the Fatah.
 * The PRFLP attempted to separate the struggles of the Palestinian people from Islamic Jihad, disowning any who thought it to be jihad. The group is strictly secular.
 * The PRFLP did not conduct any known terrorist attacks following its split from the PFLP, and instead served as a left-wing Marxists-Leninist political group.
 * Founding
 * 1972
 * Location
 * Lebanon, after Palestinian militants were removed from Jordan.
 * Leaders
 * Prior to split
 * George Habash
 * A Palestinian Christian politician who founded the left-wing secular nationalist PFLP.
 * During the 1948 Arab-Israeli war, George Habash was home from college visiting his family. In July, the Israeli Defense Force captured Lydda, and expelled the Arab residents. During this removal of Arabs from Lydda, Habash's sister was killed. Habash developed a deep hatred for Israel due to this incident.
 * After graduating from medical school, Habash worked in refugee camps in Jordan while simultaneously running a clinic in Amman.
 * In 1951, Habash formed the Arab Nationalist Movement. Later, in 1957 Habash was implicated in a coup in Jordan, aimed at overthrowing King Hussein. After, he fled to Syria.
 * In 1967, after the Six-Day War, Habash grew disillusioned with Nasser, and moved to establish his own organization. This organization was the Popular Front for the Liberation of Palestine, the parent organization to the Popular Revolutionary Front for the Liberation of Palestine.
 * In 2000, Habash stepped down from leading the Popular Front for the Liberation of Palestine. In 2008, Habash died of a heart attack in Amman.
 * Mastermind of the 1970 Dawson Field hijackings, which contributed to the crackdown on Palestinian militants after Black September. Due to his influential role in the failed efforts in Jordan, Habash was a divisive figure in the PFLP. Some of his subordinates believed him to the reason they were ousted from Jordan, and that his failings were a large part of the reason that PLO was nearly destroyed. This infighting lead to several factions within the PFLP to split off and form their own organizations.
 * After the split
 * After the split from the PFLP, Abu Shibab, formerly a Politburo Member of PFLP, became the leader of PRFLP.
 * The PRFLP was focused more on enacting political change, rather than conducting terrorist attacks.
 * Largely because Shibab sought to avoid the failures of the PFLP during Black September.
 * Group Information
 * General Information
 * Size
 * Around 150 PFLP militants joined PRFLP. PRFLP never got to play any major role in the Palestinian struggle. In its initial phase of existence, it is said to have received support from Fatah.
 * Beliefs
 * The Popular Revolutionary Front for the Liberation of Palestine believes in the one-state solution to the Israei-Palestinian conflict.
 * It does not recognize the state of Israel.
 * “Nothing but the elimination of the state of Israel was acceptable” (Janke, Peter, and Richard Sim).
 * Rejected “all forms of political compromise with Israel”
 * A part of the Rejection Front
 * GTD Data
 * External Links