User:Maddiemohon/History of smallpox in Mexico/Dan18769 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Maddiemohon et al.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Maddiemohon/History_of_smallpox_in_Mexico?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * History of smallpox in Mexico

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead has not been edited, nor does it need to be, as the lead contains a brief summary of all sections of the article, making it a good lead of proportional length to the article. The changes in the article predominantly cover corrections to the spread of the disease throughout Mexico and the response of local people to enforced mitigation measures. While some sources that are heavily used by the group date from the 1930s, it is acceptable considering the historical nature of the topic, novel information is not likely to surface. The quoting of primary sources from the event is certainly relevant to the topic, However, mentions of a regent's daughters might not be notable enough to be included in the article; if some consequence resulting from their arrival can be given or found then it certainly warrants inclusion. Coverage of the resistance of local citizens to official control measures is most relevant and covers those who might not otherwise have a voice. Nevertheless, the information is well-balanced with the rest of the article and is presented in a neutral tone. Some informal speech is used, namely the phase "kind of". No additional images were added, but few candidates probably exist and even fewer that would improve the content of the article. Overall, these changes fill in missing historical information and are a good improvement to the article.