User:Maddieshoemaker23/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Concussions in high school sports

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I have chosen this article because I am interested in researching concussions in high school sports a bit further. This article holds importance because it is spreading awareness about the dangers of concussions in high school sports. It is giving the basic information needed to understand what can happen and what you can do to prevent a concussion at a younger age while playing sports like football. My first reaction to the article was that it is not fully up to date in regards to terminology used. However, it still does have the necessary information to remain a knowledgeable article.

Evaluate the article
The article's status is listed as C-class. The article has strengths in that it lists many different symptoms of concussions, as well as background information. It can be improved by updating the terminology used, as well as giving more detailed information on the specification of the involvement of concussions in high school sports. I think it may also be improved by adding the discussion of more sports to the article, such as lacrosse, hockey, etc. The article does not include any images, and they may be an important addition to help improve understanding of the topic at hand. The organization of the article is very neat, it is sectioned off and put into separate paragraphs as it relates to the information given. I think the lead section could definitely be a bit lengthier, as it does not include a lot of information regarding high school sports and it is a bit disorganized with its thoughts. The first sentence is not a hook sentence (in my opinion), it really just states a fact about concussions. The lead section does not discuss the separate sections involved in the article, either. The talk page is a part of the article that is not as strong. It does not have a conversation going on -- only one comment from years ago. I think this leads to the fact that this article has been a bit abandoned in the last few years, hence the lack of updated-ness it has.