User:Madeleine.olive/ONONDAGA HISTORICAL ASSOCIATION/Miloshi525 Peer Review

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Madeleine.olive & Arfleming
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I think the lead accurately reflects on the material of the article. I think including a quick list of the different locations in the lead would be good for readers. Mentioning the two Post-Standard articles isn't super necessary for the lead, but works best down below in their sections.

There needs to be more details about the history of the association, like how it came to be. This section talks more about recent history rather than what has made the OHA.

Adding more information to each museum location and getting rid of their hours of operation and cost of admission would make the most sense. If someone wants to know their hours and other visiting details after reading this article, they can look that up themselves. The purpose of this article to educate readers on the details of these places. I personally would love to read more about how each museum is different from each other and why the several locations exist. I think adding what features each place has would be great, maybe also adding the types of exhibits each holds. On their website, there's a lot of really interesting information about each location and their exhibits that I think your article could really benefit from the inclusion of.

I don't think the 'Founders' section is necessary as it doesn't add much to the context of the historical association. If anything, adding important figures to the 'History' section would be best.

Overall, the sources were consistent and correct throughout the draft, but I think the article could benefit from linking other Wiki articles in it.