User:Madelineutter13/Rain Man/Sabreezy24 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Madelineutter13


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Madelineutter13/Rain_Man?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Rain Man

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Madeline's drafted Sandbox is an addition to an existing article, so it doesn't really have a lead, nor is the current lead of the article updated to include her information. Instead, her Sandbox proposes a new section to the article that wasn't there before, a section exclusively dealing with the portrayal of Savant Syndrome within the context of Rain Man. It contains content stemming from two sources, a New York Times article and a scholarly scientific journal about Savant Syndrome. Both of these sources were posted after 2000, so I consider them to be relatively up-to-date. As it is a section about Savant Syndrome, it does well to address a topic related to a historically underrepresented group.

Because this section of the article deals with Savant Syndrome, it does inherently overrepresent the topic of this type of disability, but this is obviously balanced out by the rest of the currently published article's lack of attention to this subject. Therefore, the tone of the section is neutral and is not in any way attempting to persuade the reader to think any certain way about this topic. That being said, I feel as though some of the content within this section is a bit unnecessary: namely, the amount of attention paid to author Daniel Tammet's experiences in life as an autistic person with Savant Syndrome. Tammet has no connection to the movie Rain Man or any of its related content other than the fact that he shares the same disability as the character of Raymond Babbit and mentions how he could sort of relate to the movie in a New York Times article. While this user does give a good description of certain behaviors and routines performed by Tammet as it relates to Raymond Babbit, I find the information a bit jarring and out of place when it comes to the rest of the article.

The links used in this section of the article do in fact work and take me directly to the sources. One of them is behind a paywall so I was unable to properly evaluate it, but the other is an incredibly thorough and peer-reviewed scientific journal with a variety of information about Savant Syndrome. The content is well backed by these sources from what I can see.

Overall, the section of the article is well-written and easy to read and understand. The only thing I would suggest is removing the unnecessary information regarding Daniel Tammet and making sure to include things relating to the movie Rain Man.