User:Madisonminelli/Prison healthcare/Mk1925 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) User:Madisonminelli,  '"Prison Healthcare" article.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Madisonminelli/Prison healthcare
 * Please let me know if this is the right place to be reviewing-- it's the only article I could find, but it seems a little confusing.


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Prison healthcare

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Information is interesting, relevant, thorough, and fills gaps in the existing article, which is relatively brief. The information you added also provides critical balance because it seems (at least to me) that the original article may have been overly optimistic about the quality of healthcare received in prison, and I specifically appreciate the info added on HIV because it is more up-to-date and represents a specific health concern outside of the more generalized information on "healthcare." It's hard to confirm the sources statement-by-statement since (at least in the draft I'm viewing) the bulleted statements or sentences in body are not cited individually, but based on the References list provided it seems like all of the sources are reliable. Good job with linking within the article body for accessibility.

I'm having a hard time evaluating organization because I'm not sure if the bullets under "Article Body" are meant to be added to sections throughout or under a specific/separate section, but the article seems pretty clearly organized!

A few typos (many of these are from original article text as it appears within the draft I'm reviewing, so not sure if y'all are interested in making those changes but):

- "receive" in bullet 2 under "Article Body"

- "History" section begins "Oftentimes, these medical researches..."-- not sure in context if this is supposed to read "researchers," but "this medical research" seems to make more sense.

- Again in the first sentence of "History" : "lead" should be "led"

- plural of "deer" is "deer"